Stuck in a loop

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False hope, hopeless romantic, whatever label you see, please try not to judge me.  Hope it makes you feel something real. 

Stuck in a loop

To work so hard and to try,
to try and fail, bye and bye.
To feel hope spring eternal,
then to hate being futile.

To want to go through the door,
then not want to, anymore.
But to see a chance to give...
to create beauty, to live.

The heart suffers so badly,
to go through life so sadly.
The agony on my face,
To know I'm in the same place.

You'd think time would make me wise,
but I believe the disguise.
I am fooled everytime!
The failure is always mine.

Only to fail once again,
stay to chase the light, a sin?
On my knees I fall to grace,
please release me from this place.

Only again to be shown,
this cross I bear is my own.
I will grow my roots in clay,
and grow strong and tall one day.

Future generations know,
what you reap is what you sow.
or false hope is what i sell,
only the future will tell.


 











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charmlessman2d commented on Stuck in a loop

09-14-2011

best poem i've read in a while! such strong conviction, and true meaning. told so swiftly and well. great job. keep writing. don't ever stop.

cutbanksam commented on Stuck in a loop

02-18-2011

I really enjoy your poetry. Another fav and a 10.

Tempestlady

02/19/2011

Thanks for stopping by to read and rate. Your comments are greatly appreciated.

earthly commented on Stuck in a loop

02-19-2010

It is hard being stuck in the loop-bearing the weight of neverending feelings of frustration and disharmony-you spoke to me...Earthly

Tempestlady

02/20/2010

Most people relate to this poem very well, it seems to be a universal feeling for most from time to time. Glad you liked it. Thanks for reading...Write on...

Madelynn commented on Stuck in a loop

01-27-2010

'Only again to be shown, this cross I bear is my own. I will grow my roots in clay, and grow strong and tall one day.' -Oooh, this a very insightful, heavy write. I think you have created a piece that makes us all sit back and take a moment to self-reflect. I hope thats a good thing, LOL! You have delivered a taste of truth-in the eyes of the reader! Great Job, Maddi

Tempestlady

01/27/2010

Thanks Maddi Your comments and suggestions are always appreciated. I like what you said about encouraging the reader to self reflect and truth. Write on.....

SavVySam commented on Stuck in a loop

01-04-2010

Perspective...I see a heart that has not been hardened by the hurts and a will to press on and try again...and I call that hopeful resiliency! Very nicely done!

If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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