Subliminal Madness

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  • Brad1
  • Wow how life is fuel for the scribes.

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This is just something I drummed up in a matter of 10 minutes. Its merely a rough draft rather than a poem at the moment. I have to work on the flow and rythym, for I see some flaws.

Subliminal Madness

Contemplating, decapitating,
all who dares to test.
Distinguish this anguish,
pumping violently in my chest.

There's no ropes, no chains
no delaying its will
It targets your throat
just for the thrill

You can not save me.
I will not mourn.
You can not save me.
I will not mourn.

Heated bricks,
Spiked pits of fire.
Gases, boiling
acidifiers.

Its a plague,
it's a horrible wrath.
It's a freak show,
The wicked's aftermath

You can not save me.
I will not mourn.
You can not save me.
I will not mourn.

Robes of fire
Stakes of pain
Kings of the dead
perched on the slain

Pierced emotions through oceans
of darkness.
I am awoken with potions in this apartment.
My words are not spoken
outside this department.
Fair goes this institutionalized embarkment.

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knight4696 commented on Subliminal Madness

10-02-2009

The evil is tangible in this one. A very dark look into one's mental demise. I love Dark poetry - I think it takes a lot of imagination in it's creation and is harder to convey. Great Job!

Venom637 commented on Subliminal Madness

10-02-2009

Indeed a very dark poem. I love it, I think you could really pull off the dark aspect of poetry. Keep up the good work.

When power leads man towards arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the area of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.

John F. Kennedy (1917-1963) Thirty-fifth President of the USA

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