Submerged

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  • Confusion
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  • Fantasy
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  • Emotion

    Poem Commentary

    "hey, take me to nuclear reactor / I wish to dive into core, wanna fly, fly, fly / a ray of blue lights surrounds my body, beautiful / hey, take me to nuclear reactor / if I could dive into core, and then cry, cry, cry / all sins I did will be allowed within a miracle" http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0Ox5-fEH4Ww

    Submerged
    Eyes shot open
    Doors slam shut
    In my hands I hold it
    Igniter lights the dark
    Nothing left to feel
    The space becomes small
    I suddenly need air
    If life becomes a sin
    I don't know if I should care
    Unable to see within
    What is there, I don't know
    When it's time, where to go
    The ocean breathes
    I'm breaking free
    In my hands I hold it
    Submerged, I fall
    I can't let go
    Eyes wide open
    I can't see anymore
    The ocean becomes a hole
    Waves break
    Air stops
    Hands wait
    My life becomes a whole
    I can't hold on
    I let go
    I'll never know

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    Artie commented on Submerged

    06-21-2010

    There is much uncertainty in life. It seems to move so fast and leaves us sometimes disoriented in darkness, grasping and trying to hold on to things we want or need. Sometimes we succeed, and sometimes we fail - 10 from me
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    FadingFebruary

    06/27/2010

    Thank you so much for the encouraging comment and great rating! I wasn't sure I liked this one, but I'm glad you like it so much! Thank you!

    Poetry is what is lost in translation.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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