Surfer Dude

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None of us has a pure heart.

Surfer Dude

Surfer dude

            Riding the waves

Into oblivion

            Ne’er watchful

For the fins

            Swarming

To engulf and

            Devour

Your dreams

 

Your passion

            Enthralls

While danger lurks

            I stand watchful

To watch your demise

            I say nothing

Because I delight

            In your destruction

Thinking erroneously

            to be my saving grace.

 

Pity you

            Or envy me

I could be you

            Or you could be me

So let’s grip the board

            Of mindfulness together,

Lest we both survive.

 

Jean Marie

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Insideme commented on Surfer Dude

08-18-2010

A beautiful image put into words, crafted wonderfully. thank you for sharing and for the explanation of the poem below. I didnt see it like that at first but now I see. Poetry means so many different things to different people.

jeanpnkldyg

08/18/2010

I try to put an image to the soul..Thanks for taking the time!

NativeAmeriGirl commented on Surfer Dude

08-18-2010

Muy Bien!!!! An amazing write.....muchas gracias for the honor....siempre, Native

jeanpnkldyg

08/18/2010

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment! Many returns!

NevillePark commented on Surfer Dude

08-11-2010

Well Jean... I have to admit. I'm confused about the story behind an odd thought line. It's a death wish wrapped in brown paper somehow. Could be you - could be me - so tell us what we need to see. Maybe it's a vacationing postal worker on his way to a break from reality followed by a tragedy and a national headline.Could be. I dunno ... I'm certainly curious about this by-stander in any event. It's engaging but I find (for me at least) I need more to go on.

jeanpnkldyg

08/11/2010

Thank you, Neville for commenting. My surfer dude is riding the crest of the wave to the pinnacle of life - but is unaware that somewhere some might secretly be wishful for his demise, thinking it was undeserved, thereby equalizing all. We could be either person in this scenario - and in either case - both are likely to survive.

stellar commented on Surfer Dude

08-09-2010

the dark truth...well i can so much relate with you...I love the way how you do it....wow....

jeanpnkldyg

08/10/2010

I like to believe that truth is light on the dark cravasses...if your heart was lightened - there be the truth.

Phoenix9 commented on Surfer Dude

07-31-2010

Excellent poem full of feeling and feelings expressed as one truly watching and waiting for the dreams to survive as long as we stand together

jeanpnkldyg

07/31/2010

Glad to have you comment. Many returns - I am indebted to many. Jean

Poetry is not a turning loose of emotion, but an escape from emotion.

T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

jeanpnkldyg’s Poems (51)

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When Words Fail.... 1
For His Glory....a prose piece. 1
My Place...today 0
Just a thought... 1
I Pray 0
Sufficient Fear 1
Purposed to Love 0
Grace 0
Mother 0
Illegitimate Child 0
Word 0
Facebook Fetish 0
When the Ancients Love... 0
Going Home 0
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Never Ending... 1
For J. C. P. (13y) 2
Fly Away 6
This Battle is .... (2) 7
TO BE LOVED 5
Look Up.. 3
MYSTERIOUS ENEMY 1
boredom 2
Angels 2
Christmas Musings 6
Letters, Artwork and Inspiration 4
The Vanished 8
What more to say... 6
For the Fall 5
Gratitude 3
Surfer Dude 26
Cave 16
Glorious, Wonderful.... 4
So far, Untitled 4
Love, Leave me alone 6
I saw your face 4
Request for Intercession 3
Until My Dying Day 11
No Glory Here 5
Day Is Done 6
Immersion of Self 4
Returning 4
My Children's Mother 6
Fortunate Circumstance 2
Sentiment for a Daughter 4
Untitled Conversation 4
Alone With God 6
Still Waters 7
The Soldiers Prayer 4
Slip Away From the Darkness 4