sweet as sugar.

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I shiver when I hear you slam the door. I shake when I hear your feet on the floor. I crumble to pieces when I hear your voice blaming me for one of the problems you've caused me.

sweet as sugar.

I've lost all energy, all motivation, all desire; to run away.
The hope is still there, the want is still there; for someone to come rescue me.
You haven't noticed. If you were a real mother, you'd have seen it by now...
That I'm slowly growing quieter, less caring, more silent.
Less effected, more dumb, more useless to you.
I used to be sweet as sugar.
And now I'm just a diluted lost-cause.
I warned father, I told him about you.
He laughed, he's afraid of you.
You're just a woman. You're just an animal.
You have no teeth, you have no claws.
They're only words.
I'm used to falling off my bike or roller skates on sticks and stones.
Terrain and fallen pieces of tree can't injure me forever.
Scars heal.
Bruises heal.
Hell, even asphalt melts back into place if something cuts it.
Diamonds can be polished.
And books can be re-bound.
But what you've done to me has no reverse-effect.

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Crush commented on sweet as sugar.

11-11-2010

this is sad on many levels. mother, father and child. however, the depth of your talent and ability to tell a story continues to simply amaze me. 10

AlysonAlive

11/11/2010

Thank you, Crush. ♥

phatdaddee commented on sweet as sugar.

11-10-2010

You express yourself so well! I feel so much honesty in this poem! Truth is so refreshing and obvious to the heart! Thanx for sharing!

AlysonAlive

11/11/2010

Thanks so much. ♥

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