Tell me what it's like

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Tell me what it's like

Camping at 10,000 feet, he asked me, and I thought for a moment or two,
then blurted out the first things that came to mind.

Cold. Very cold.

It’s wild and beautiful. It’s can’t-see-your-hand-in-front-of-your-face dark,
with stars so close I could have plucked them from the skies,

if I tried.

Peaks shrouded in mystical shadows held every story never told. Hard, rocky soil managed to cradle my body in a soft embrace. Nestled in the earth’s arms
I felt the tree roots stir and stretch; heard an owl-

at least I told myself it was an owl

-calling in the night and I shivered in the isolation, welcomed it with a happy smile.
I awoke not realizing I was numb until it bit me like a million tiny teeth
clinging to every nerve.

At that moment I knew, knew I was alive.

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1dean commented on Tell me what it's like

04-22-2009

ok, so you know something about writing you need to expand without diluting try juxtaposing ideas. work themes together. almost everyone has a few short poems in them, so try to build something that has more endurance. quite frankly, not into first person singular

Poetry comes nearer to vital truth than history.

Plato (BC 427-BC 347) Greek philosopher.

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