The Crocodile

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    The Crocodile

    I watched you through the smoke,
    your soul dancing behind you,
    And from the look in your eyes,
    I knew it wasn't through.
    The embellished pain you were suffering
    hurt me worse than you could imagine,
    Stabbing me in the heart like a dagger;
    I knew I couldn't win.

    You twisted the dagger claiming oblivious excuses
    No matter how I pleaded and how I cried,
    I felt my heart
    And it died.
    Along with my hope and along with my dreams
    And still I love you no matter how I seem.

    So I watched you through the smoke
    with your charming smile,
    And I knew I was dead.
    You - the Crocodile.

    You shook my body
    And the life poured from within
    And with that my breath;
    I knew I would not win.

    So you are the victor,
    but it was worth the risk
    And that was the last time that
    Life and I kissed.

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    Artie commented on The Crocodile

    01-10-2010

    This is a powerful piece!! You have so many great lines in here, and tell this with such passion. 10 from me

    xxlheart commented on The Crocodile

    04-02-2009

    what a great original idea you have here. you worked it well. would lose the "like a dagger" line because it compromises the uniqueness you have going but other then that i would call it an excellent poem.

    WordSlinger commented on The Crocodile

    04-01-2009

    what a metaphor, interesting

    Grito commented on The Crocodile

    03-31-2009

    Life's vagarys as a kiss!

    Poetry is what gets lost in translation.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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