The Delusion

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    I am in the process of writing my second novel, The Delusion.  This poem was written for the MC who is a poet at heart and this poem will represent the novel. 

    The Delusion

     

    The cold dark canvass of the pond
    Is perfected for natures art
    Thriving by the light of its moon
    The pond flickers with life
    Yet, remains ever still
    Waiting
    Wanting

     Capturing only what is real
    Its reflections are distorted
    By what lies deep underneath
    Habiting murky souls
    It remains ever still
    Waiting
    Wanting

     Mesmerizing the mind, it calls
    With promises of friendship, peace
    But its haunting breath enfolds you
    Bequeathing you with fear
    Yet, remains ever still
    Waiting
    Wanting

     There is a lone tree by the pond
    You run for its stability
    Trusting in its deep seeded source
    But it is the Delusion
    It possesses and leaves you
    Waiting
    Wanting

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    Meldarth commented on The Delusion

    03-07-2010

    Wow.......wow; the imagery.......very deep Dawn.....loved it.....
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    dawnjyc

    03/07/2010

    Thank you very much!

    jademelissa74 commented on The Delusion

    12-14-2009

    At face value, this piece offers such a wonderful imagery, imagery that leads the reader to a realization of life trials and tribulations. Your words are piercing in content. Great job Dawn!
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    dahlusion commented on The Delusion

    11-30-2009

    Beautifully surreal, dreamy, dark and light. I am wondering: should it be Illusion instead of Delusion, or am I missing a deeper more subtle message in my translation?
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    dawnjyc

    12/13/2009

    Thank you for you kind comments. It is definitely a delusion as the tree represents a false security.

    Artie commented on The Delusion

    11-28-2009

    This is crazy good!! It has beauty, depth, imagery, and a poignant message. 10 x 10 from me
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    dawnjyc

    11/29/2009

    Thank you so much! Your comment gave me a little boost!!

    gogant commented on The Delusion

    11-28-2009

    I guess you could say...still waters run deep. Very nice work.............................................................................gogant
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    dawnjyc

    11/29/2009

    Thank you!

    If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

    Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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