The Empty Echo Of Silence (Moriah)

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Here I tried to describe the price of vanity in not confronting the real need for world change and especially national change. It seems to be creating a kind of unspoken collective anxiety that may just be our undoing.

The Empty Echo Of Silence (Moriah)

What of this wild desire to run, jump,

Scream, hide, or retreat

Outside our cage, wherein we are confined

Inside our human mind.

Its forward motion is like a lost locomotive

Barreling down the tracks;

A runaway train whose erratic action

Is far too swift and unruly to now redirect.

Collision stands certain if not soon derailed,  

With only one unknown; the size of the aftermath.

 

Angst’s vile blade plunges clean to the quick.

An anxious jugular puncture stymies the thoughts as

Bitter blood beats forth from our heart of malcontent.

There comes a conquering wind which descends,

To bring us solace; our last request for release.

This perfect storm was formed in our conscience’s absence.

It is bore to settle the score of a preborn insipidness.

We stand arms outstretched, in our final act,

To greet this baleful harbinger of truth;

It mounts the sky as failure’s deliverance.

Attrition pillages us bare toward complete abandonment.

The remains of the day are laid waste against the wild wind.

It snuffs out the last flame’s light that once freely danced and leapt.

Not a single cinder smolders, nor smoke wisp attempts lift.

What was sown is now reaped, our plight has now peaked.

Not else stands erect save the empty echo of silence.

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Hampton commented on The Empty Echo Of Silence (Moriah)

11-03-2009

A very powerful write my friend. Your ability to paint images with words is a gift and one you should cherish.

knight4696 commented on The Empty Echo Of Silence (Moriah)

09-18-2009

Great job - I think you captured exactly what you were attempting to as explained in the poems commentary. You achieved it in a very visual and poetic way. You summed it up perfectly in the line " Collision stands certain if not soon derailed, With only one unknown; the size of the aftermath" Such an intense and powerful statement. This poem is a real wake up call. Again, another great work.

swiftbird2C

09/18/2009

Thank You. It came from a very intense emotional upheaval where the sense had to be channeled, summoned, and expressed.

SavVySam commented on The Empty Echo Of Silence (Moriah)

09-14-2009

Two magical lines stand out brilliantly in this image rich piece. This poem comes alive for me in these two lines "Angst's vile blade plunges clean to the quick" and my other fav- "The remains of the day are laid waste against the wild wind." Good work.

swiftbird2C

09/14/2009

This was almost like dictating when i wrote it. The Muses thank you

graceladymn commented on The Empty Echo Of Silence (Moriah)

09-06-2009

Stunning in imagery, brillant crashing movements, a storm to reposition, fabulous!

Poetry is not the expression of personality but an escape from personality.

T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

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