the flower garden

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this is a song i wrote a couple of years ago... a love song with a dark twist

the flower garden

i love you more than you could know
this loves for sure now what it grow
the flowers bloom and grow so tall
i dream of you my living doll


you look so sweet with your eyes closed
with hair so dark and lips so cold
i love your skin so milky white
is this a sin it feels so right

    ill plant a flower garden for you
    and watch my life's love in full bloom
    ill nurture it with all my love
    a living symbol for both of us

please dance with me just one last time
ill kiss you deep as i cry
ill hold you close and squeeze you tight
you feel so cold by my side

i loved you enough to put flowers above you
ill think of you when they bloom
a shallow grave no marker to see
just a mound of dirt and memories

ill plant a flower garden for you...

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inkmaster commented on the flower garden

01-14-2010

Dano, great write it flow is like a smooth body of water.. I enjoyed it..Thanks for sharing...Inkmaster

teriweeks commented on the flower garden

01-14-2010

It's interesting and somewhat dark. There's one typo you may want to fix though

danmartyjake1 commented on the flower garden

01-14-2010

Very eerie poem, almost necrophilia-like or serial killer style, hope your not offended, but it felt scary to me. Great choice of words and style. A few typos, and punctuation stops, but I got the jist. Very Creative!

Poetry is what is lost in translation.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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searching the darkness 10
a letter from santa 14
thanksgiving (acrostic) 12
the depth of... 11
ive wished 7
absentee 12
this is... 13
a journey into the dark 7
the cold of november 14
your voice 12
the yin to the yang 14
twisted 9
autumn 14
i think it happened again 11
luna~tic 19
the darkness 13
a blinding eclipse 16
the universe... 18
the wind of sorrow 14
my sorrow weeps 16
where but the dark... 12
immortal kiss 47
in a darkened room 17
our mother 7
within these flames 12
nocturnal (acrostic) classic rock 7
behind wrought iron bars 25
what i write (part 2) 8
today 17
the world in grey 6
the reality of... 5
in the shadow of a mountain 6
nothing will ever be the same 10
of cemetary dreams (and nightmare scapes) 12
next to a bed... 18
but... 15
at a funeral 12
seventeen (acrostic) 11
the fortunate one(s) 7
what did i do... 24
ashes to dust 45
dancing in the moonlight 14
disempowering the pain 14
the butterfly 10
what i write 14
sorry (i killed the after glow) 11
the humidity rises (an erotic tale) 9
pieces of light 8
the sad pumpkin &... 9
my face 12
for a long time... 14
(an explination of) distractions 6
tell me... 6
the charelston cookie tin 9
silent self destruction 8
exposed 13
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a poem about nothing... 8
blood bleeds black 7
dissecting myself 3
i will be just fine 3
the stacking of bricks 3
the complexities of depression... 4
spirits & ghosts 3
**random chaos** 2
bloodlust 3
...somethings missing... 2
15 years... 3
beauty sleeps entombed (parts 1 & 2) 3
**untitled** 2
the overstuffed closet 3
the candy dish 2
anxiety speaks 2
**untitled** 2
myself and the light 6
the fog 2
fire and tears 3
cerebral meltdown 3
sometimes i wish... 1
drawing strength from a starr... 2
disappointmen
t...
1
**untitled** 1
the flower garden 3
nature... 1
reaching out 2
the dark and the light... 1
the insistent demon 2
sorry... 3
forgive me lover... (parts 1 & 2) 2
im so sorry... 3
**no title... just random thoughts** 1
to eternity... 2
winter wind whips... 1
tired 2
lucid dream 1
the rains came... 2
the mourning light 1
another jagged pill 1
i just cant... 1
entitlement?!
?!?
1
entitlement!!
!!
1
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inside of me 1
projected pain 1
the night... the dakness & the truth? 1
panic 2
the mourning fog 1
when the fires burn 1
through the night 1
shadow casts 0
a mournful rain 1
i cant protect me 2
my comfort place 0
an echo shifts 1
the monster 2
welcome to my life 0
the past is alive... 1
... 1
standing on the edge 2
my smile... 1
anxiety 2
my reality 0
another view... 0
untitled... 0
jagged pill 2
in the dark 1
what to do 1
how can i... 1
life... 3
a crust of pain 1
keeping me weak... 2
my dark world 3
another night of wondering 2
in the attic 4
i hold most dear 2
the me inside of me 2
another day 1
dreamed in a dream 2
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i look... 1
where my secrets are kept 1
a mouthful of words 2
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i am aware (i'm already dead) 7
standing in the silence of my own shadow... 3
a blinding dark 1
growing pain 3
the longest of nights 5
... 7