the girl i use to be

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    no lie a poem of my life. this poem differs from my other works srry if it's not all that great

    the girl i use to be

    All the pain swirls inside of me

    like churning water in the sea

    I listen to them argue

    even though I ought not to

     

    stealing away inside myself

    to somewhere where there's no pain left

    catching glimpses of a life

    where my only pleasure isn't the slash of a knife

     

    struggling deep inside of me

    is the wreckage of the girl I use to be

    before the days of hate set in

    this wasn't the girl I would have been

     

    the girl who keeps secret's under lock and key

    wasn't the girl I hoped to be

    the fighting continues leaving nothing but silence

    all I can think is “ enough with this quiet!”

     

    running away to a better place

    my tears streaming like clear painful lace

    I try to hold on

    but I already know all hope is gone

     

    screaming I try to confide

    in the one place I know I can hide

    all the pain that keeps me up at night

    crying into the darkness without light

     

    not cringing at the blade on my skin

    knowing it's the only one I can confide in

    crimson droplets that fall tell my story

    how I know that they don't worry

     

    wishing I could end it all

    though knowing I wouldn't hurt them at all

    looking past what I am to see

    the girl I use to be

     

    long gone is my hope

    my solitary oath

    the one that you placed on me

    that was the girl I use to be

     

    looking at what I am today

    could you still say

    that I am me

    that I'm the girl I use to be...

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    sk8erpoet commented on the girl i use to be

    02-10-2011

    awesome write...i know how you feel, ive been there...you can almost feel the pain as you read it..great write..your a awesome poet....keep writing....sk8

    LenaM commented on the girl i use to be

    12-25-2010

    excellent write Ami been here though for me it wasn't cutting struggled nearly all my life with crippling depression keep writing it was the thing that saved me from myself

    amithissecret

    12/25/2010

    its the same for me its my saving grace sometimes. that and the one person whom i miss dearly he's talked me out of a few tight spots and thanks for commenting

    angelchaser commented on the girl i use to be

    12-24-2010

    Wow, Ami. This is a very good piece, honey. You express pain wonderfully, one can almost feel what you're going through as you describe cutting. I hope you find your way out of the darkness. I've been there much of my life........it's no place to live. PM me anytime if you want to talk, need to vent, or just need a friend.

    amithissecret

    12/24/2010

    i will if i have internet i will

    ForeverPoet commented on the girl i use to be

    06-27-2010

    with each setback, with each heartbreak, with every tear...........we grow! great read! keep writing! I'll keep reading!

    JayJ420 commented on the girl i use to be

    06-15-2010

    Futillity is what keeps us the most distracted to our morals, but change is nothing but good us to help us learn, let go, and move on.....love it.....Jay-J

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