The Journey

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Why am I here. What if there were nothing at all. No earth or sky. Not a minute nor a thought ... no one to live - no one to die. Who'd do that that very thing but you and I. I have to offer this as a "median"belief structure reflective of the thoughts from the everyday man (or woman) outside that my own compass has been established (if not altogether heeded). I

The Journey

THE JOURNEY

 

We’ve got holes in our souls

where the wind blows right on through

Darkness is a pain but it’ll carry me and you

It beckons and cajoles while the earth is opened up

The sky’s like solid rock while life is shaky like a pup

 

We don’t know ‘bout that life line

Outside it’s founded in a hope

While some are into drinking - a lot are into dope

Chariots anchored in tomorrow might

Just as easy burn away

We might not even get there

and if we do what might we say?

 

Can we be thankful for the journey?

Further still where lies it’s worth?

Was it ascertained before hand?

Was it scripted for our birth?

Was it caught up in the sunrise?

Moving further off each day

Was it fashioned for the wind that blows

Once the storm has had it’s way?

 

Was the cull to frame the  beauty which is resident in in love?

Wherein this question’s swallowed up

And grouped with the above.

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soulwriter commented on The Journey

04-19-2010

"Wherein the question's swallowed up with all of the above" Yes, all of the above.... we all have different life journey's and we encounter many commonalities, you my friend have summized the beauty of it all. Well done - live strong!

NevillePark

04/19/2010

Thank you soulwriter. So now what remains for me, as our astute member Aria has pointed out ... is to do justice to the poem and pull out the twigs and branches which mar the beauty.

cousinsoren commented on The Journey

04-19-2010

Ah, yes! " The sky's like solid rock while life is shaking liike a pup" and .......... "Chariot anchore in tomorrow's night Just as easy burn away." This poem contains some euperbly and refreshingly crafted poetic devices as above........an exquiste philosopical jewel Those rhetorical questions in the last stanza effectively challenged my mind. My ratinng for over-all faultlessness is 10x10x1o+

NevillePark

04/19/2010

Love you man!

dahlusion commented on The Journey

03-25-2010

"Can we be thankful for the journey? Further still where lies it’s worth?" — the truth in each of our lives is at time so hard to see because "We’ve got holes in our souls where the wind blows right on through". Beautifully penned with deep truth, my friend. Bravo!!

NevillePark

03/26/2010

It can get scary I have to suppose, for man and womankind to take an honest inventory when there's a hardened agenda we're paying abeyance to. I try not to be too opaque myself, but we all have to cope. I much appreciate you, your comments and your own body of work. I'll get to reading more of yours as the weeks go by. Thanks again.

To have great poets there must be great audiences too.

Walt Whitman, American Poet (1819-1892)

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