the longest of nights

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the longest of nights

consumed by the night in the dark of my dreams
awaken by the shadows that dance in my sleep
inside of my eyes a tortured display
devouring my mind the demons at play
a paralyzing tale i near dare not tell
the nightmare they weave in this visual hell
still they go on with this hellish display
consuming my mind the demons at play

the organic dark seems to move and to breathe
alive with a mind it is able to think
it feeds on my fears and devours my dreams
as i lay wide awake unable to sleep

i hear in my ear as the dark steps in close
a sinister stinch invading my nose
i feel on my neck the dark's icy breath
a pull on my heart from the cold hand of death
at the end of my rope it offers a noose
to find the relief, or live if i choose
the horror i face in this nightmarish dread
and the panic i feel invading my chest

alive with a soul the dark comes to me
peeling my eyes so i'm able to see
cluching my lungs so i cannot breathe
and crushing my head so i cannot think


the night is to me the cancer that eats
consuming my soul and devouring me
with no escape the night is still young
not sure if the worse is still yet to come
unble to see the dark has taken my eyes
and unable to think with a blugeoned mind
squashing my lungs i can't catch my breath
i know what i choose if i choose death

completly controled on this longest of nights
not able to see though the blood in my eyes
the world has gone dark, devoid of all light
i am self consumed on this longest of nights

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knight4696 commented on the longest of nights

11-28-2009

Dano ... I really enjoyed this one. A very dark and deep glimpse into one's innerself. A graphic account of one who is tormented and possessed by his own inner demons. The rhyme, flow and imagery are all superb! A really Great Job! ...... Ken

ReRe commented on the longest of nights

07-13-2009

I like the rhyme. ; ) I too am troubled by demons at play only when the night allows my mind to become dark. I think it shows the creativity you hold. But its the noisy mind that keeps us slaves to it! I love it .

Dano

07/13/2009

thank you ReRe it is not often that people get what i right, or understand where i come from when i write about the dark, and things that happen to the human mind when the lights go out...it takes someone who has similar issues with a busy mind and a heavy heart to realize the true lack of silence in dark...

devaamido commented on the longest of nights

06-05-2009

I can't agree with "syllabics". On the contrary, the manner in which you've repetitiously repeated the rhyming scheme lends the poem a foreboding sense of crushing inevitability that strengthens the poem & I believe that's what you intended.

syllabics commented on the longest of nights

11-25-2008

This poem had some good imagery, the rhyme was good but almost got in the way of the heavy subject matter. It would be cool to try another one along similar lines without the rhyme.

When power leads man towards arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the area of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.

John F. Kennedy (1917-1963) Thirty-fifth President of the USA

Dano’s Poems (150)

Title Comments
Title Comments
from an angels view 19
searching the darkness 10
a letter from santa 14
thanksgiving (acrostic) 12
the depth of... 11
ive wished 7
absentee 12
this is... 13
a journey into the dark 7
the cold of november 14
your voice 12
the yin to the yang 14
twisted 9
autumn 14
i think it happened again 11
luna~tic 19
the darkness 13
a blinding eclipse 16
the universe... 18
the wind of sorrow 14
my sorrow weeps 16
where but the dark... 12
immortal kiss 47
in a darkened room 17
our mother 7
within these flames 12
nocturnal (acrostic) classic rock 7
behind wrought iron bars 25
what i write (part 2) 8
today 17
the world in grey 6
the reality of... 5
in the shadow of a mountain 6
nothing will ever be the same 10
of cemetary dreams (and nightmare scapes) 12
next to a bed... 18
but... 15
at a funeral 12
seventeen (acrostic) 11
the fortunate one(s) 7
what did i do... 24
ashes to dust 45
dancing in the moonlight 14
disempowering the pain 14
the butterfly 10
what i write 14
sorry (i killed the after glow) 11
the humidity rises (an erotic tale) 9
pieces of light 8
the sad pumpkin &... 9
my face 12
for a long time... 14
(an explination of) distractions 6
tell me... 6
the charelston cookie tin 9
silent self destruction 8
exposed 13
the means of the day (a true valentines poem) 2
a poem about nothing... 8
blood bleeds black 7
dissecting myself 3
i will be just fine 3
the stacking of bricks 3
the complexities of depression... 4
spirits & ghosts 3
**random chaos** 2
bloodlust 3
...somethings missing... 2
15 years... 3
beauty sleeps entombed (parts 1 & 2) 3
**untitled** 2
the overstuffed closet 3
the candy dish 2
anxiety speaks 2
**untitled** 2
myself and the light 6
the fog 2
fire and tears 3
cerebral meltdown 3
sometimes i wish... 1
drawing strength from a starr... 2
disappointmen
t...
1
**untitled** 1
the flower garden 3
nature... 1
reaching out 2
the dark and the light... 1
the insistent demon 2
sorry... 3
forgive me lover... (parts 1 & 2) 2
im so sorry... 3
**no title... just random thoughts** 1
to eternity... 2
winter wind whips... 1
tired 2
lucid dream 1
the rains came... 2
the mourning light 1
another jagged pill 1
i just cant... 1
entitlement?!
?!?
1
entitlement!!
!!
1
burning within 4
inside of me 1
projected pain 1
the night... the dakness & the truth? 1
panic 2
the mourning fog 1
when the fires burn 1
through the night 1
shadow casts 0
a mournful rain 1
i cant protect me 2
my comfort place 0
an echo shifts 1
the monster 2
welcome to my life 0
the past is alive... 1
... 1
standing on the edge 2
my smile... 1
anxiety 2
my reality 0
another view... 0
untitled... 0
jagged pill 2
in the dark 1
what to do 1
how can i... 1
life... 3
a crust of pain 1
keeping me weak... 2
my dark world 3
another night of wondering 2
in the attic 4
i hold most dear 2
the me inside of me 2
another day 1
dreamed in a dream 2
a year in the life (dealing with death) 1
i look... 1
where my secrets are kept 1
a mouthful of words 2
i will not fear (when my eyes are blind) 2
i am aware (i'm already dead) 7
standing in the silence of my own shadow... 3
a blinding dark 1
growing pain 3
the longest of nights 5
... 7