The Monsters Of The Moat

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Poetry Survivor Entry - Final Week - March 2010 (Poetry Survivor Contest Winner!)

The Monsters Of The Moat

These cold dark walls surround me,
Securing my mind and heart.
Locked away - I keep myself,
Protected from any harm.
This fortress I've created, 
Is the Castle of my soul.
A place where I can hide from,
The Monsters of the Moat.
~~~~
Wading in sludge - they hunger,
For another taste of life.
Hiding within the darkness,
Somewhere deep inside my mind.
They'll feast upon the anguish,
If ever given the chance.
So here I must stay captive,
A prisoner of circumstance.
~~~~
Many of souls have fallen,
Attempting to cross the bridge.
None have ever gained access,
To this Knight that lies within.
They've always met the dragon,
Who would burn them to a crisp.
Or suffer the serpent's bite,
Who was hiding in the mist.
~~~~
So, if you feel you must try,
Take heed, these words I've spoken.
This journey is not for the meek,
It takes power and devotion.
To gain entrance you must possess,
strength and determination.
If not .. you will surely face,
Wrath and annihilation.
~~~~ 
You must prepare for battle,
To conquer the raging beasts.
To kill them is the only way,
To obtain the key they keep.
Only then may you enter,
Upon making a solemn oath.
But, If you fail to deliver,
~ You'll meet ~
The Monsters of the Moat!
~~~~


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tierra7 commented on The Monsters Of The Moat

05-04-2010

{{{{Bravo}}}}}} Mr Ken- This is exclusively an incredible write...you have such a beautiful stimulatin' mind ....As I've said before I have a high addiction to your poetry...I needed a fix..~SMILE~ ..you're on a roll....Love N Light.......Tierra @}-'-,-

knight4696

05/04/2010

Thx T ~ This was my personal mantra for many years (so to speak) I was always protecting my innerself from any harm ... I have grown a lot since this write and thanks to the support of my friends and my loving queen. The moat has been drained and the monsters have been slain! Thanks again my friend for your wonderful comments! :) Ken

Madelynn commented on The Monsters Of The Moat

04-09-2010

Ooooo-creeeeepy monster lurking under the moat.get to close, and HE"LL GOBBLE YA UP!! lol,-I love this so much! There's that 'effect' to it! I actually read this to my 12yr old, his reaction was so cool, Ken! His big gray eyes grew, and..I seen him take a deep breath at the end, like he was in deep thought with the insane visuals you created(and always do)-So, I lunged at him with a big, loud-"AH!" Aside from almost poopin' his pants-he lived!,lol!-point is..this write is THAT intense. You are a great story-teller, m'friend!-;Maddi

knight4696

04/09/2010

lol! Thank you so much Maddi! :) I'm glad you read him this one .. I think Damsel's Demise might have given him nightmares! lol! You always manage to humble me so with your awesome comments my friend! I so appreciate the time you spend reading and commenting. Thanks again! :) Ken

Rhymer commented on The Monsters Of The Moat

04-09-2010

How did I miss so many of your wonderful writes. This is another shining example of the talent in the pen you wield. 10 from me and into my favs.

knight4696

04/09/2010

Thank you so much Rhymer! This one was posted on my page before - I had to pull it off - to enter it in Poetry Survivor - It was the winning poem. I appreciate your comments and sentiments very much. Thanks again Pal! :) Ken

Altair commented on The Monsters Of The Moat

04-08-2010

Wow, talking about a warning, my goodness haha, you can be quite persuasive sometimes, well all the time, when you get into your dark place, you really embrace the shadows...loved this one, all the things you do so well, shine all to true

knight4696

04/09/2010

lol! Thanks my friend! Ya I was just a little guarded - don't ya think? lol! My Queen has definately broke thru my defenses and has killed the raging beasts! Once again - you humble me so with your comments. Thanks for being such a good friend! :) Ken

stellar commented on The Monsters Of The Moat

04-07-2010

I really love the metaphors in this poem knight...To kill them is the only way...there are some things that are just like this...to choose only one and it's hard...Congratulations Knight...^_^ v

knight4696

04/09/2010

Thanks Stellar! :) I wrote this about my heart and soul. I have been hurt a couple of times in this life and I became very guarded and self protective. It has taken me a long time to allow another person back in - but my queen has broken down my defenses and I am now standing tall and proud! :) Thanks again for the wonderful comments my friend! :) Ken

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