The Offering


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Don't Worry ... You're Among Friends ~ You've Nothing Here To Fear! I challenge you to find the hidden ~666~ within these evil words, Find it and you will be spared. ;)

The Offering

"Don't worry", they told me ..
You are here amongst friends,
You don't need to pretend,
"Don't worry", they told me ..
There's no reason to hide,
So cast your fears aside.
"Don't worry", they told me ..
There's nothing you can do,
We're now a part of you.
"Don't worry", they told me ..
Just present him your soul,
You'll gain complete control.
"Don't worry", they told me ..
Evil will set you free.
Expose for all to see.
"Don't worry", they told me ..
You'll never feel the burn.
There's still so much to learn.
"Don't worry", they told me ..
Your powers will soon grow.
There's still so much to know.
"Don't worry", they told me ..
It's ancient desire.
Born of Hate, Death, Fire.
"Don't worry", they told me ..
The flame is eternal.
Flesh feeds the inferno.
"Don't worry", they told me ..
Go ahead, take a taste,
One sip is all it takes.
"Don't worry", they told me ..
The pains temporary,
It's Death's ceremony.
"Don't worry", they told me ..
Your time has come to die.
Soon you'll be by his side.
"Don't worry", they told me ..
You're our source of power.
Our virgin Offering ~
of the Witching Hour.
"Don't worry", they told me ..


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Altair commented on The Offering


my my, this poem screams something of the illuminate', my goodness it gave me chills a little bit but dont worry they told me a choice is still a choice lol, dont listen to me Im just talking out my head lol...nice yet creepy



LOL! :) Don't worry they told me to tell ya .. They'll get ya next time! lol! :) Thanks again for the awesome comments and reads my friend! :) Ken

angel33614 commented on The Offering


Intriging write my friend, very horrific images, vivid to the smallest detail, almost as through a place you have been, lol. Maybe you slayed a couple of dragons down there while searching for you fairmaiden in the castle's keep, lol. A bewitching poem to say the least, a virgin sacrifice to gina power, power of the freedom from the illusion of society? I think I see the a hint, just a fiant shadow int eh corner of the room... In the death of the flesh and reunion of one's soul, one is born to the freedom of escape, escape from the constraints of one's own reality, the power to control one's own fate, a journey traveled outside the box of illsusions and in the sahdows of one's mind, to contend the reality of the world, the freedom of the darkside as it shadows the pain and agony of one's heart... Hmm, perhaps. Perhaps I see, perhaps I am blind. I am not quite sure if I have found the hidden meaning yet I know it is there staring at me in the face, I am perhaps to blind to see it... great poem my friend!!! Purotu of the soul, journey well!!! Angel aka poem buster



lol! :) Thanks Angel! ... No, you can rest assured .. It'd not a place that I have been. Well, I guess I have been there .. now that I think of it. I ventured there in my twisted mind while writing this evil tale. I appreciate that you dare to journey in my darker writes .. I love to play in the Dark as you surely know, but I live and love in the light. Thanks again Pal! :) Ken

earthly commented on The Offering


Macarbe,yet intrigueing-enjoyed the read, but....It's all a creation of imagination right? Namaste...Earthly



LOL! :) Yes Earthly, it's complete fiction .. just another dark spoof from my twisted imagination! :) Thanks! :) Ken

Ming commented on The Offering


I loved this . . great write my friend . -Ming



Thanks Ming. I happy you enjoy my darkside Pal! :) Thanks again, much appreciated! :) Ken

Madelynn commented on The Offering


696969696- oh sorry- the whole virgin sacrifice thing made me think of John! LOL! Serious now,this poem rocks. I love this occult type horror- must be the kid in! I think this is just perfectly twisted enough to,-make me read 'er again, and again..69696969- whoops- maybe I better not, I mean the man does need his sleep once in awhile!-lol, You are a master Ken-too cool,Maddi



LOL! :) Thanks Maddi! ... I don't think John is complaining - and if he is ... slap the boy silly... but, then again he might like that too. lol! :) Sleep - who needs sleep. There's enuff time for that when we're dead! :) Thanks for the read and flattering comments as usal my friend! :) Ken



lol..Ken if ya only,- dare ya to ask him 'bout the 'belt thing'lol. -wait a sec here, who says you sleep when your dead?? When I go out- I'm going to totally pull a George Romero! LOL,.. hey your writes deserve flattering, I should be thanking you for allowing us to eye dance on your brain-creations..'mmmm- brainz'-uh oh, see it's starting already! LOL!!- Maddi

Poetry is what is lost in translation.

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