The Old Mansion

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Nice. all errors should be fixed...

The Old Mansion

This old mansion, so tall and old
ancient stone now barren and now cold
do we dare enter, ghosts live here
nervously we approach, watching with fear

what was that? a figure in a window?
was it an illusion of a wind blow?
its not there anymore, i believe it’s clear
come on friends! i hear your teeth chattering in fear!

Chorus

       They say the old mansion on the hill
       Inside if you enter, you will find a thrill
       Silently, be careful as you cross into
       Or, if you’re not, you'll witness exactly what’s true

                      Malum Pollens
                      Malum Pollens
                      Infeste Calisa
                      Malum Pollens
                      Malum Pollens
                    Infeste Exanimus

We enter into the mansion, cautious and slow
Blood soaked the walls and windows
children perhaps? a mischievous deed
than the door closed, and the walls began to bleed

we ignored the warning, taking caution and heed
the dare was made, our unbreakable creed
standing there in the cold dark air
we prayed we wouldn't become prey unaware

the walls stopped bleeding and crying
and the screams started, something terrifying
we stood our ground, making the usual excuses
it was the wind with a tree that was making the noises

the moans and groans started to appear
we disproved them as floors and continued to bear
there was no power to the place, but the lights would flicker
about that time, we began to see her...

Chorus

       They say the old mansion on the hill
       Inside if you enter, you will find a thrill
       Silently, be careful as you cross into
       Or, if you’re not, you'll witness exactly what’s true

                      Malum Pollens
                      Malum Pollens
                      Infeste Calisa
                      Malum Pollens
                      Malum Pollens
                    Infeste Exanimus

I first saw her in the corner of my eye
she was young and pale, she vanished when i turned to look by
we decided since everything appeared to die
we should explore our new hideaway

all in a group, we roamed the rooms
finding pentagrams, rodents, and other skeletons
a little uneasy, we continued to explore
we came across a tiny little door

Chorus

       They say the old mansion on the hill
       Inside if you enter, you will find a thrill
       Silently, be careful as you cross into
       Or, if you’re not, you'll witness exactly what’s true

                      Malum Pollens
                      Malum Pollens
                      Infeste Calisa
                      Malum Pollens
                      Malum Pollens
                    Infeste Exanimus

We opened the door, the dead were there
human remains stacked on top of one another
blood painted the walls, sanities end
some holy magic, god please lend!

we backed away from the unholy chamber
blood oozed out and spread like an opening flower
slowly the blood took form and rose
the devil or a demon took form, God's Foes

then the dead crawled out from the door
i saw that girl again, she waved, and ran from that floor
quickly i followed, yelling for my friends to join
she raced into another room, where dead hung like tender loins

She dashed into another room, it was pitch black
we ran in, but slowed due to the lack
of light, we couldn't see, then the door shut and battered
we heard bones move around us, and little girl laughter

Chorus

       They say the old mansion on the hill
       Inside if you enter, you will find a thrill
       Silently, be careful as you cross into
       Or, if you’re not, you'll witness exactly what’s true

                      Malum Pollens
                      Malum Pollens
                      Infeste Calisa
                      Malum Pollens
                      Malum Pollens
                    Infeste Exanimus

Chorus

       They say the old mansion on the hill
       Inside if you enter, you will find a thrill
       Silently, becareful as you cross into
       Or, if your not, you'll witnes exctly whats true

                      Malum Pollens
                      Malum Pollens
                      Infeste Calisa
                      Malum Pollens
                      Malum Pollens
                    Infeste Exanimus

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EyesOfRain commented on The Old Mansion

08-29-2012

Very creepy and cool! Love it! Does Malum Pollens and Infeste Calisa mean anything in particular?

EvilPoems

08/30/2012

yes, malum pollens means something like evil influence and infeste calisa means something like hostile evil

EvilPoems

08/30/2012

and infeste exanimus means in latin hostile dead

Viper89 commented on The Old Mansion

04-22-2011

Sounds like a twisted version of Stephen King's Rose Red! Also sound like a movie script I'm writing about Sloss Furnace in Alabama called Hell's Furnace! Very well done!!!

ShadowStealer commented on The Old Mansion

08-22-2010

So jealous of your poems!!!!! Keep writing these creepy wonders! ShadowStealer

EvilPoems

08/22/2010

always will :D

SuSpence commented on The Old Mansion

05-20-2010

I love this one too. It is like a much more dark and creepier version of Hotel California! haha. A lot of raw talent in you there is (in my yoda voice) Lol. I think you should check out more Nirvana, honestly your writing, songwriting style, reminds be a bit of thier stuff, just a little darker content. Another terrific piece you penned here. (had to look up some of the latin though haha) -Spence

EvilPoems

05/20/2010

I love hotel California!!! :D

ApaqRasgirl commented on The Old Mansion

05-06-2010

wow, chilling, that gave me goose bumps reading this. you painted that haunted place very well with your words, not somewhere one would ever find me. thanks for sharing love Asha

EvilPoems

05/07/2010

i do my best!

Poetry is what gets lost in translation.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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