the risk

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    i haven't written anything in months....let's see how this goes...

    the risk

    he said feel fast
    fall later
    hurt harder
    stay and let go
    a bridge forms
    a bridge falls
    stiff arms open
    and fall short
    and a witness
    to what remains
    holds fast
    to broken aims
    we just arrived
    we just left
    go back to simple
    go back to every-
    word he said
    a laugh
    a lie
    a laugh
    a laugh
    oh how i loathe you
    how i knew when i met you
    and how did i become you
    and somehow
    now i taste freedom
    soon gone
    soon gone
    only a breath
    only a sigh
    only
    only
    one

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    mustascheman commented on the risk

    03-26-2010

    Definitely different. In a good way of course. It's like poetry you would here someone recite at....like a coffe house or something. Quite intreging. Well done.

    lorenzo commented on the risk

    03-23-2010

    methinks it goes well... original... mysterious...beautiful...

    The true philosopher and the true poet are one, and a beauty, which is truth, and a truth, which is beauty, is the aim of both.

    Ralph Waldo Emerson, American Poet (1803-1882)

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    the risk (new revised version) 0
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    if i could talk 3
    the choice 1
    untitled.....
    .once again...
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    youth 3
    the risk 2
    stolen 4
    out of life 1
    truth 1
    naked cigarettes 2
    a new silence 2
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    often and then 15
    dead girls are easy 13
    mine 5
    untitled 6 7
    accusations in peace 5
    untitled 5 6
    untitled 4 4
    untitled 3 4
    untitled 2 3
    untitled 4
    haiku 6
    unconditional 7