The Spider approach to poetry,,,,,,,hope I kinda right...

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The Spider approach to poetry,,,,,,,hope I kinda right...

no pun intended to the lesson name, just an old one I had saved for a children's book that I thought had a lot of imagery.....

Little Fly, Who's Name Is Blue & Mrs. Spider

As I sat under the old willow tree...
I watched Mrs. spider floating with ease...
Between two branches, a thin line she spun...
As Mrs. Spider weaved her nest, with perfection...
Back & forth from limb to limb, in that weeping willow tree...

Mrs. Spider I noticed did have a nice nest...
As I saw a Little Fly fluttering within her web...
His eyes looked, looked so scared...
As his little body shook with terrible fear...
Vibrating Mrs. Spiders web, into such a mess...

Mrs. Spider did move a little closer, to the fly, making such a mess...
As Little Fly's eyes widened with fright, his body all a shutter...

Mrs. Spider looked at Little Fly and wrinkled her brow...
"Why are your shaking with eyes so big, making a mess of my nest?"

Little fly looked at Mrs. Spider, with a shaky voice...
She did hear him utter...

"Please don't eat me Mrs. Spider"
"For I did not listen to My Mother"
"She said to Beware of the Spiders Web"
"But I did not listen to My Mother and flew straight into your Nest"
Little Fly, did utter, shaky words to the spider

Mrs. Spider then cleared Her throat...
An Scolded Little Fly so Bold...

"A child should always Listen to Their Mother"
Mrs. Spider Did Scold Little Fly
"For A Mother is Always Very Wise and Only Wants to Protect Her Children"
"I have many Children of My Own"

"I Always teach them to listen to What I Say, as I Am, Their Mother"

"What is your name Little Fly," Mrs. Spider Did Ask?

Little Fly eyes so big did shutter, as...
Mrs. Spider did move a little Closer...

"My name is Blue, as I was the second child, of My Mother's"
"Please don't eat me, Mrs. Spider"
"For I did not listen to My Mother"
"She said to Beware of the Spiders Web"
"But I did not Listen and flew into your Nest"
"I'm sure I would only taste like all the others"

Mrs. Spider just sighed, she put two legs together...
Released Little Fly, named Blue, from her Nest...
She help him just before her Face...
Little Fly, named Blue, began to shiver with fear...
And closed his eyes tightly together...

Mrs. Spider then began to Speak, & say...
To Little Fly, who's name is Blue, with haste...
For Mrs. Spider now having much more work to do...
To repair her web, had no time to deal with Little Fly's named Blue...
When Mrs. Spider had no more time to waste...

"If, I turn you loose, Little Fly, who's name is Blue"
"Do you promise to always Listen"
"To your mother, everyday, Little Fly, who's name is Blue"

Little Fly, who's name is Blue, did slowly open his eyes, his tiny voice did mutter
A squeaky voice of surprise...
Mrs. Spider did hear him say, with wide eyes...
"Yes, yes, I promise to always listen, to My Mother"

Said Little Fly, who's name is Blue, without a Shutter

Without any hesitate
To his surprise, Mrs Spider, got right to work...
She spun out a length of her Web...

Then lowered Little Fly, who's name is Blue, down to the ground...
Then he heard the words, Mrs. Spider did state...

"I have Eaten too Many Little Fly's of Late"
"I do not Prefer Another one so soon"
"Run along Home to Your Mother"
"Little Fly, who's name is Blue, and Remember this lesson"
"I have no more time to waste, now my work is behind"
"With Little Fly's, who's name is Blue, today"

Written by:
Asha
2010©

Welll I hope I got this close......lol

From watching the video WS posted on writing poetry:
He called it the SPIDER effect sorta.....but I had this poem already writtin some time backi and it seen like a good one to try this lesson on.

S: for scenario & scheme
P: for purpose
I: for imaginary
D: for diction or dictionary of words in poem
E: for economy, the layout of the stanzas, the position of the lines to follow the  meaning of the poem.
R: for rhythm & rhyme

Scenario, & scheme: creatures can do miraculous things
Underlying purpose: life is never what it appears
Imaginary; picture yourself watching this scene unfold
Diction or dictionary; a lesson on how your parents always have your protection and future in mind when they tell you not to do something.
Economy: the lines and stanzas are laid out to follow a certain storyline for kids
Rhythm and rhyme; I wanted to just rhyme the first and last lines of each stanza and making the middle follow the rhythm

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ginga commented on The Spider approach to poetry,,,,,,,hope I kinda right...

08-12-2010

Asha, A wonderful undertaking, I feel you did agreat job revising an older poem and adapting it to the lesson. ginga

ApaqRasgirl

08/12/2010

thank you ginga, coming from you that is a great compliment...I was afraid people would think I thought the video lesson meant to write a poem about a spider.......lol.......nope just a coincidence......lol...thanks I was hoping I kinda hit all the points mentioned in the video........loves ya asha

GUSTY commented on The Spider approach to poetry,,,,,,,hope I kinda right...

08-12-2010

I'VE LIKED,APPRECIATED AND ENJOYED YOUR WORK; BUT MOST OF ALL I'VE ALSO LEARNED THE LESSON OF TAKING 'MUM'S ADVICE'. A RICH WORK OF INTELLIGENCE. BRAVO!

ApaqRasgirl

08/12/2010

thank you dear friend, I am thrilled you enjoyed my work....thanks.love asha

WordSlinger commented on The Spider approach to poetry,,,,,,,hope I kinda right...

08-12-2010

I think it is brilliant Asha, I would've learned the lesson it me mums recited this to me when I was a lil nard, ty WS

ApaqRasgirl

08/12/2010

thank you WS, glad you liked it........I was trying to go by the instructions in that video you put up and this just happened to be and old one I had done that had a lot of imagery,,,,,,,well hope it did anyway........lol...thanks loves ya asha

Teardrops commented on The Spider approach to poetry,,,,,,,hope I kinda right...

08-11-2010

I hate spiders but truly love this poem . YOu have taken a childs poem and taught us adults a few things . One life can change and our nature can be altered .thanks for a great read Marie

ApaqRasgirl

08/12/2010

thank you dear I am glad you liked it.........love asha

jtlove commented on The Spider approach to poetry,,,,,,,hope I kinda right...

08-11-2010

cute ..*****************************************************************************************************************************************************

ApaqRasgirl

08/11/2010

thank you, glad you liked it......love asha

Poetry is not an expression of the party line. It's that time of night, lying in bed, thinking what you really think, making the private world public, that's what the poet does.

Allen Ginsberg (1926-1997) U.S. poet.

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