the universe...

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    the universe...

    the universe is testing me and i dont like it
    twisting and turning and pulling me
    and i dont like it

    showing me things
    id rather not see... and
    bringing back painful memories


    playing with my emotions
    without the notion
    of what it is doing to me


    pulling at my heartstrings
    opening old wounds to bleed
    and i dont like it


    the universe is mocking me and i dont like it
    seems to be that it is laughing at me
    and i dont like it


    rubbing in my face the things
    forcing me to think... and
    dusting off cobwebbed memories


    toying with my emotions
    setting tears in motion
    that might destroy me


    grinning as my heart beats
    mashing salt where i use to bleed
    and i dont like it


    the universe seems to be testing and mocking
    and grinning and laughing
    and playing and
    toying with me
    and
    i
    dont
    like
    it

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    ginga commented on the universe...

    09-19-2010

    Dano, Your one repetitive line is the hook in a poem of what gets to someone. It works here and all that you dislike is warranted. ginga

    Dano

    09/20/2010

    thanks for taking the time to read and comment

    JadedJezzabel commented on the universe...

    09-18-2010

    the universe seems to be testing and mocking and grinning and laughing and playing and toying with me and i dont like it AWSOME ENDING TO THIS.........A 10 ++++++++++++++++++

    Dano

    09/18/2010

    thank you

    MarionYost commented on the universe...

    09-17-2010

    A never ending cycle for the hell that we refer to as life & yet we keep pressing on. Great write. Definitely one of my favorite poets on this site. Keep 'em coming! All the best -Marion-

    Dano

    09/18/2010

    thank you so much marion for your continue support of my work... it is greatly appriciated

    redbloodink commented on the universe...

    09-17-2010

    I liked this write for I know this test but I stand in faith that Jesus didn't die in vain for me.... nor did He die in vain for you.... just keep making better life choosing choices and laugh back...... red

    Dano

    09/18/2010

    thanks

    Chaos128 commented on the universe...

    09-16-2010

    Great rendition. I guess we all feel like that sometime or other... Like the universe is a great big dartboard and we're the bullseye.

    Dano

    09/18/2010

    thanks for taking the time to rea and comment...

    Poetry is what is lost in translation.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

    Dano’s Poems (150)

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    Title Comments
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    the depth of... 11
    ive wished 7
    absentee 12
    this is... 13
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    the cold of november 14
    your voice 12
    the yin to the yang 14
    twisted 9
    autumn 14
    i think it happened again 11
    luna~tic 19
    the darkness 13
    a blinding eclipse 16
    the universe... 18
    the wind of sorrow 14
    my sorrow weeps 16
    where but the dark... 12
    immortal kiss 47
    in a darkened room 17
    our mother 7
    within these flames 12
    nocturnal (acrostic) classic rock 7
    behind wrought iron bars 25
    what i write (part 2) 8
    today 17
    the world in grey 6
    the reality of... 5
    in the shadow of a mountain 6
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    of cemetary dreams (and nightmare scapes) 12
    next to a bed... 18
    but... 15
    at a funeral 12
    seventeen (acrostic) 11
    the fortunate one(s) 7
    what did i do... 24
    ashes to dust 45
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    pieces of light 8
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    my face 12
    for a long time... 14
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    tell me... 6
    the charelston cookie tin 9
    silent self destruction 8
    exposed 13
    the means of the day (a true valentines poem) 2
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    dissecting myself 3
    i will be just fine 3
    the stacking of bricks 3
    the complexities of depression... 4
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    **random chaos** 2
    bloodlust 3
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    **untitled** 2
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    the fog 2
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    cerebral meltdown 3
    sometimes i wish... 1
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    disappointmen
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    1
    **untitled** 1
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    nature... 1
    reaching out 2
    the dark and the light... 1
    the insistent demon 2
    sorry... 3
    forgive me lover... (parts 1 & 2) 2
    im so sorry... 3
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    winter wind whips... 1
    tired 2
    lucid dream 1
    the rains came... 2
    the mourning light 1
    another jagged pill 1
    i just cant... 1
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    ?!?
    1
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    !!
    1
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    inside of me 1
    projected pain 1
    the night... the dakness & the truth? 1
    panic 2
    the mourning fog 1
    when the fires burn 1
    through the night 1
    shadow casts 0
    a mournful rain 1
    i cant protect me 2
    my comfort place 0
    an echo shifts 1
    the monster 2
    welcome to my life 0
    the past is alive... 1
    ... 1
    standing on the edge 2
    my smile... 1
    anxiety 2
    my reality 0
    another view... 0
    untitled... 0
    jagged pill 2
    in the dark 1
    what to do 1
    how can i... 1
    life... 3
    a crust of pain 1
    keeping me weak... 2
    my dark world 3
    another night of wondering 2
    in the attic 4
    i hold most dear 2
    the me inside of me 2
    another day 1
    dreamed in a dream 2
    a year in the life (dealing with death) 1
    i look... 1
    where my secrets are kept 1
    a mouthful of words 2
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    i am aware (i'm already dead) 7
    standing in the silence of my own shadow... 3
    a blinding dark 1
    growing pain 3
    the longest of nights 5
    ... 7