There's No Beauty in the Breakdown

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There's No Beauty in the Breakdown

What disappoints me the most about you
isn't who you were
but who you've become and now fail to be.
I loved you then
back when you wanted something out of life.
when you were trying to put worth to your name.
Even if your methods were immoral-at least you tried.

Now-you're different.
Let her make your decisions for you
what's acceptable to society-
must be right.
Even if it doesn't make you happy-
even if you have to be spiteful-
just to feel alive.
To feel anything, but sorrow and self doubt-
remorse-
regret-
Try not to slip into denial.

It's a little harder to escape it
the thought of who you've become.
Not a tattered coat upon a stick
because that's poetic-beauty in the tragedy-
glory in the fall-
No-now you're just tired;
gave up on real love-
gave up on life.

What disappoints me the most-
is who you now fail to be.

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toredbloodink commented on There's No Beauty in the Breakdown

03-14-2017

Failure and dispare is not defeat stand back up and feel alive... Thanks for the write it sparked a desire of I need to write even more

theladyz commented on There's No Beauty in the Breakdown

07-28-2009

This poem has some real promise. The picture is stark and brutal, the tone sad and sarcastic at the same time, but I thing the final sentence is overkill, maybe say it in a different way?

LluviaPhoenix

07/28/2009

Thank you for your advice, and your comment!

Aspiration commented on There's No Beauty in the Breakdown

05-28-2009

I really like this poem....especially the first three lines. Those 3 lines speak so much to me. Nice work.

LluviaPhoenix

05/30/2009

Thank you!

A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness. It finds the thought and the thought finds the words.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

LluviaPhoenix’s Poems (19)

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There's No Beauty in the Breakdown 3
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