Thick and Concrete

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  • hcrellers
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Thick and Concrete

She’s inside, looking out through her walls

There in the eye of the hurricane

Helpless to what’s happening

A little girl, incomplete

She’s becoming those walls

Thick and concrete

No one can see in

Not even me

I don’t know who that girl is

What she wants, needs

I see her beating on those walls

Trying to break free

Her hands are bleeding

They won’t let her be

They scream "On with the show!"

The curtain is coming up

Somehow she goes on

A smile on her face

She’s a puppet in the play

She knows all of the steps

All of the right things to say

They applaud, adoring her

Wishing she was theirs

She wishes they could see

They’re suffocating her

Killing me

I tell her to be what they want

Show them what they want to see

Keep us hidden

She cries "Why are you doing this to me?"

I am the murderer and the victim

I lock her in tight

I throw away the key

She is a prisoner inside me

I have ignored her cries

She lies in defeat

In her pretty white dress

With smudges on her cheeks

She no longer cries

No longer speaks

She’s become these walls

Thick and concrete

Her beautiful smile

Her happiness

Is now just a dream

A dream no one will ever see

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DeepEclipse commented on Thick and Concrete

02-16-2010

Interesting. It was like you were viewing yourself from a third person perspective, showing a sense of disowning the flatterer and instead demanding respect of the reality. [I am the murderer and the victim I lock her in tight I throw away the key She is a prisoner inside me I have ignored her cries She lies in defeat] - read to me like defeating the half that trades fear for acceptance. Society does love its show. And if you don't speak your lines you won''t get cast in the play. I like how this piece slaps it in the face.

hcrellers

10/10/2010

:) this was my favorite poem for the longest time

icyblueingenue commented on Thick and Concrete

01-28-2010

nice peom. i somtimes feel like this to btu i dont rite about it. maybee i shoud start.

hcrellers

01/29/2010

thank you. i try to write about everything.. it just seems that my best poems.. are about my pain.. makes sense though.. because most artists of any kind.. have felt pain

Poetry is what is lost in translation.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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Something 2
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The Spider and the Fly 1
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Intuition 1
Broken Ballerina 1
Wishing Star 1
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Thick and Concrete 2