This Halo and Those Wings

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  • AshRenee
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This Halo and Those Wings

Bells jingle as I open the store door.
The counter, too high to see over,
holds the small bell I touch
to remind The Man I'm here.
A booming voice from the back,
"Yes, child?"
"Please, sir, I want this
golden halo
and these fluttering wings."
He still doesn't step out.
"It's all I ask.
All the beautiful life in this store
and all I want is this
perfect halo
and helping wings.
I have penance, sir, you see.
I pay you."
A moment's pause before a regretful
voice, "Not enough, child.
Not enough."
I sink off my tip-toes beneath
the counter and shuffle out and
away from the gate
and hear the lying chirp
of the bells.

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ARU commented on This Halo and Those Wings

03-19-2017

Excellent work! Continue the writing craft you a truly skilled, best of fortune...

angelchaser commented on This Halo and Those Wings

03-11-2011

Ashlyn, you are capable of writing poetry at a depth I can only dream of obtaining. This is a great piece, I mean that.

Tyme commented on This Halo and Those Wings

03-11-2011

I don't know if I understand. Was this a rejection of a request and a dejected "child" walking away because the price is too high? I don't get a sense of hope from this but rather a sense that "heaven", which is alluded to, is unattainable, Not only that but I also sense the store keeper is unwilling to help because the "lying chirp" of the bells is the last thing we hear. . Is this accurate?

AshRenee

03/11/2011

Not because the price is too high, no. More of my feeling that no matter what we do, we are always going to have doubts, whether we express them or not, and that keeps complete faith from forming, more of a hope as we stay here and wait out our duration. As for the rest, you are spot on.

Ninjaboy commented on This Halo and Those Wings

03-11-2011

very nice.. very nice... i wonder though, how you came up with this.. all the same, its good =)

Poetry is finer and more philosophical than history; for poetry expresses the universal, and history only the particular.

Aristotle (384 BC-322 BC) Greek philosopher.

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