this is for a friend. [version 2] pronoun-free suggested. (:

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VoiceMilkNHoney suggested I make a pronoun-free version of this poem. I think it adds a generic approach so one can put someone they know into it. (Boy or girl, young or old) More personalization.

this is for a friend. [version 2] pronoun-free suggested. (:

So suicidal.

So suicidal...Can't go on in this terrible world.

 

Please find the silver lining...Won't hold on.

Views...as a string hanging from the pants, that if touched and pulled too much, the entire seam will just...pop...

 

Why not make life into a pair of cut offs?

Honestly, use some creativity!

 

Make life into something new and useful.

 

Don't just end...cease...finish on your own...

Don't leave me alone and by myself...again.

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feldmarschal commented on this is for a friend. [version 2] pronoun-free suggested. (:

03-03-2011

I can't believe that you're only 14, honey! You have just done a textbook "parody"! Masterfully executed and very concise. You've everything together well. I would like to see a Part 2 to this...Well done, Alyson!

AlysonAlive

03/03/2011

Thanks! Hm...Any ideas for a part 2? If you have any suggestions, I'm willing to write one up! (:

Poetry is what is lost in translation.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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