THIS YOU CAN"T SEE

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    THIS YOU CAN"T SEE

     The thought just came over me.....
    I was starting to lose something......
    You may not ever see......

    You came into my life.....
    We hardly knew each-other,
    You're saying your my wife......
    After four days, of what ever.....

    You started to consume me.....
    Thinking you could solve my every dilima.....
    This you may not see.....

    I try to tell you........
    In the kindest ways........
    This leaves you blue......
    My words never pay........

    So I would rather say nothing at all......
    You look and cry at me.......
    I feel like a brick wall
    This you can't see.....

    We didn't know where this would go......
    Now it's not far enough for you.....
    No matter how much love I show.....
    You think it's untrue.....

    I love you as a person......
    And you are nice......
    I just don't feel like one.....
    With you, it feels like a price....

    And love isn't for sale or rent.....
    Atleast not mine......
    This is my way to vent......
    A true love I hope you find....

    So Donna don't be sad......
    There is more then me.......
    Please Donna don't be mad.....
    And please don't kill thee.....

    You have so much to live for....
    You have love to give......
    I hope you find true love and more.....
    Just choose to live.....

    Because if you kill yourself.......
    That would hurt me......
    That would be selfish.....
    I hope this you see.....

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    wamomo commented on THIS YOU CAN"T SEE

    12-26-2009

    What a great poem expressing how desperately misled a soul can be in mistaking a need for hopefulness for love 'meant' to be...
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    redbloodink

    01/31/2010

    ty Wam....... I need to read some more of yours.... heck I need more time .........

    HopeOhlarik commented on THIS YOU CAN"T SEE

    12-02-2009

    i hope this Donna sees that life is worth living, because no matter how bad, dark, cold and lonley it might get it is always worth seeing the morning light. i've been there before, and i never thought that the morning light could heal so much pain. but it did. good poem!
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    redbloodink

    12/02/2009

    I hope so too Hope..... It truly is amazing how just another day can change everything Red

    jesusfreake commented on THIS YOU CAN"T SEE

    12-01-2009

    wow its beautiful despite what happening in the poem...ur words push me along until i reach the end and i cant wait to see what happens..this is music to my eyes..lol, beautifully written...
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    redbloodink

    01/31/2010

    ty Blue..... I hope you are doing well..... I'm just thankful you and so many read my work.....

    stever commented on THIS YOU CAN"T SEE

    12-01-2009

    wow thats pretty heavy at the end..i hope it dont end like that 4 real...another lovely write from u....
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    redbloodink

    12/01/2009

    ty steve.... I hope not either....

    banginmoma commented on THIS YOU CAN"T SEE

    11-29-2009

    very true and very real to what some of us feel. its a very good write. im glad you chose to share. this touches me and i look forward to reading more of your lovely work
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    redbloodink

    11/29/2009

    ty Bang......

    If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

    Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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