(Three children) new version

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    (Three children) new version

    Three children

     

    One child with a home.

    The other sitting on a thrown.

    The last only skin and bones.

     

    One child lives with his family happily.

    The other child’s family won’t spare any time.

    The last child watches his mother die.

     

    One child eats dinner at the table.

    The other child asks his chef only for the best.

    The last child consumes whatever’s left.

     

    One child plays with trucks and trains.

    The other child flies electric planes.

    The last child pretends he is jumping through traffic lanes.

     

    One child attends public school.

    The other child gets taught at home and studies alone.

    The last child has never opened a book.

     

    One child mows his neighbor’s lawn for a few extra dollars.

    The other child asks his father for it is no bother.

    The last child won’t ask for something his family doesn’t have.

     

    The three children become men everything is different for each one of them.

     

    One man is of to war.

    The other man is locked behind a jail door.

    The last man is very far from poor.

     

    This just says you do not have to start good to end great.

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    dahlusion commented on (Three children) new version

    08-25-2010

    i am speechless. i look at your age and i am in awe over this write. the contrast, the form, all of it...bravo!!. peace and light, dah

    Qualin commented on (Three children) new version

    03-19-2010

    exc. write for your age some have some..some have none....some have it all....but do they? It all works out for we are just a vapor...things like what you wrote make our stay here more pleasent...enjoyed the trip qualin

    Kaiprin commented on (Three children) new version

    12-01-2009

    Well said. I really liked the contrast between the three different lives and how you progressed their travel.

    Strider commented on (Three children) new version

    08-07-2009

    You are truly very matured for your age. Thanks for reminding me that it how you finish that counts and not how you start.

    Tempestlady commented on (Three children) new version

    08-06-2009

    Wonderful! Life's lessons can be so hard to put into words. And from one with so much life left to live. I loved the rhythm, could use some work on the rhyme, but the message was right on time! Write on....

    Poetry comes nearer to vital truth than history.

    Plato (BC 427-BC 347) Greek philosopher.

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