Three Wheelin'

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Three Wheelin'

I'm always just along for the ride
Always three wheelin'
Always the first to hide
Never the one to have that feelin'

A bike works with two
A third is childish and dumb
Just tagging along with you
Feeling alone and glum

Three wheelin'
Double dealin'
A caged feelin'
I'm kneelin'

I'm praying on number four
Four a stable set
Just one more
I've done my time, paid my debt

I'm just there
No real meaning
Straight through me they stare
No third wheel? I'm just dreaming

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fluffybunniezz commented on Three Wheelin'

10-20-2012

You know what? This would make decent lyrics if you continued it. Not like pop or rap, more classic rock. Anyways, this is a great piece and, in my opinion, a classic tale explained in an original way. I think you should omit the ending g's in the last stanza as you did with the third stanza, and that's the only thing I would change.

angelchaser commented on Three Wheelin'

05-20-2012

I know what you mean about feeling like a third wheel:). Nice write:)

Poetry is not the expression of personality but an escape from personality.

T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

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