Time trekking

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  • Passion

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    Hi everyone, this is my new poem about my idea of lasting love. Wish u like it....Thank you so much dancingpoet for the edit...Really thanks ^_^ v

    Time trekking

    I.

    A ring imbued with love

    Is the gift we both have

    Circle and boundless

    Unharmed by ages

    That may our love

    Retain the passion

    we have always had

    Keep the flame

    Burning in our heart

    Like the ring’s

    Undying gleam

    May the golden ring’s

    Unscathed gleam

    Be an inspiration

    To the usual

    Fleeting feelings

    II.

    Let us trek together

    In the path of time

    Along the way

    It may lacerate

    Our ephemeral form

    But our bond’s strength

    Made out of firm

    thread of our love

    And woven

    By our passion and faith

    Will remain unstirred

    And tie forever in our hearts

    As we trudge our way

    To eternal lands

     

     

     

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    SavVySam commented on Time trekking

    08-10-2010

    A loving blessing in this ring of a golden eternity...loving work by you! So nicely done!

    ginga commented on Time trekking

    12-16-2009

    stellar, I love the mystical mood in this poem. Somehow I thought of the holy grail and the golden chalice as I was reading this one, although you made mention of rings probably more along the lines of Lord of the Rings. Anyway yours is an original and it did make me think of all the other mytsic stories. ginga

    StandingBear commented on Time trekking

    12-16-2009

    I always enjoy discovering unique talent i've not read before! Very unique work!

    knight4696 commented on Time trekking

    11-07-2009

    Hey Stellar - A really Great Job with this one! Very passionate and emotional. I love the intensity you reflect in your wording. The style is great! Again Great Job and a well deserved 10! Ken

    stellar

    11/13/2009

    Thank you so much knight...I am really learning from your style too...thank you

    Madelynn commented on Time trekking

    11-05-2009

    This is passionate writing! Wow, this is so beautiful. Im lovin' the form as well. I could sit here and reread this, like 10 times! You pulled off a perfectly heartfelt piece! 10!

    stellar

    11/13/2009

    Thank you so much Maddi

    A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness. It finds the thought and the thought finds the words.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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