Together We Say Goodbye

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This poem was created by spbsdude and myself. I like spbsdude poems and was was very pleased to hear he would do a poem with me. I think it is one of my most fun and creative poems yet. It brings to light the heartbreak by both a man and a woman, Thank you spbsdude for doing this with me. The parts written by spbsdude are in italic and the part written by me are in bold. This poem is not only my masterpiece by spbsdude. ENJOY!!!

Together We Say Goodbye

Our relationship plays again over and over in my head,
I rewind and play the words that were said,


Your love spoke so sweetly of tenderness,
How we'd always be together, how we were so blessed.. 


We were meant to never to part like this,
Why can’t we just make up and kiss,


 
Your back so cold turned away from me,
When you told me you wanted to be free.


Our fighting became too much for me to bear,
I left you because I didn’t think you would care,


Passion and love for you filled my life,
But I could not endure such bitter strife.


Moments wasted on hostile tension,
Our love fading away was not our intention


Gone are the days when we laughed together,
the winds of change have blown in stormy weather.


Our emotions started to fade with all our harsh fights,
Until we had nothing left, but lonely nights.


Our passion fades now that you are gone,
Like a rose that wilts when love is withdrawn.


Now we know we have to walk away,
Both of us wishing we could stay,
But both of us know we can’t heal each other’s wounds of yesterday.

 
We've shed copious tears,
ignored each other’s fears,
our deepest love ended now so insincere.




In
italic is written by spbsdude

In bold is written by BrokenHeart2009

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meirozavian commented on Together We Say Goodbye

01-18-2011

Passion and love for you filled my life, But I could not endure such bitter strife. Ilove this part. Touching.....Nice writing

Bestkept commented on Together We Say Goodbye

01-12-2011

So true, so true, a memorable break-up will haunt you for...aslong as you let it.Once a BETTER person has entered your life you will soon forget about...um...um, whats his name lol

HarverTomsson commented on Together We Say Goodbye

01-10-2011

Great joint effort. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .. Harv

skymist2 commented on Together We Say Goodbye

01-09-2011

Nice collaboration when it sounds like one person wrote it. You two accomplished that. Keep writing. Sky

Topaz2011 commented on Together We Say Goodbye

01-09-2011

A wonderful collaboration. You two express all the emotions very well, that are involved. Topaz

The true philosopher and the true poet are one, and a beauty, which is truth, and a truth, which is beauty, is the aim of both.

Ralph Waldo Emerson, American Poet (1803-1882)

BrokenHeart2009’s Poems (33)

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Let Go 5
A Crush 1
Waiting For An Answer 2
Creepy 3
Question 2
Endless Fall 2
Men Are People 26
Final Words 11
A Gift to Mankind 6
Together We Say Goodbye 6
Your Wife 9
No One to Save Me From The Dark 5
In The Beginning 3
You And Me 1
My Daughters 7
Lonely 4
Don't Leave 2
The Sounds of a Broken Heart 4
Regret 7
Twisted 7
Hold Your Vows 4
Love's Bite 3
Shame On Me For Being With You 11
The Kiss's Coal 2
You Reap What You Sow 5
In Love With A Lie 5
My Story 5
Warning 2
Leave Me 2
What Do We DO? 3
Goodbye and a Smile 3
Adultery's Shame 4
The Sound of No One 3