Tormenting Seduction
Pull me close, as you slide away,whisper in my ear, as you walk out the door.
Enticing words, an offer unrestrained;
with this she torments me.
Tormenting Seduction
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whisper in my ear, as you walk out the door.
Enticing words, an offer unrestrained;
with this she torments me.
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JudeDruid commented on Tormenting Seduction
03-03-2010
- nice i love how straight to the point you get. nine fom me
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redbloodink commented on Tormenting Seduction
02-14-2010
- Sounding that was powerful.............................. short and to the point........ red
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cmlestrade commented on Tormenting Seduction
01-11-2010
- I loved the poem , especially the dichotomy, and I love the meter; but, and there is a but. I felt from the way these words come together that as the writer you would not give two hoots if she danced out the door. I can't explain that feeling. All the right words are in place but after I read it I thought it sounded sort of like a mocking that was saying go go go I have places to go and things to do. I guess it's me because I felt no torment in this at all.
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01/13/2010
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