truely touched

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truely touched

I closed my eyes…as my mind kept racing

unaware of what I would be facing

This bed I lay slowly fleeting

As the words in my head kept repeating

“you know me, the me no one else knows,

You know me, too much of me, to no one I have exposed..”

My deepest thoughts, that you know, no one knows I think

Overwhelmed in an instant I felt my heart sink

I saw a tunnel, and at the end I saw your face

A strong feeling of hope that I could not place

Did I call you, as my mind was speaking

Not being careful as my soul is leaking

Untouched, you touched me but words can not say

So real but transparent in a ghostly  way

Your eyes I saw so deep and understanding

With my hearts desires  so demanding

At peace, it was right, I felt so secure

So evil I am, you made me feel pure

Emotions untamed, wild burning fire

Ignited this flame with heated desire

This passion I hold so hot it’s blazing

I stood before you , in your eyes still gazing

So slowly your fingers traced my cheek

You took my breath and I couldn’t speak

So soft your lips, so wet, so warm

Taken away, no shape, no form

Not ever asleep, my eyes shot open

Senses alive and now awoken

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Milkman commented on truely touched

08-16-2009

this is a really good read, very mysterious.....you need to work on your word economy....sometimes saying less is more powerful....there are many places this would work on this piece, if you want to discuss it contact me in a private chat....but this is very good work

oldgoat commented on truely touched

08-03-2009

Sounds like some of the dreams I have in my sleep...I hate it when I dream like that...I wake up feeling lonely and lost... Great write...

Poetry is finer and more philosophical than history; for poetry expresses the universal, and history only the particular.

Aristotle (384 BC-322 BC) Greek philosopher.

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