UNDER WATER

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Decided to try one not sticking so strictly to rhyme.

UNDER WATER

I'm under the surface.

Floating through;
Liquid dreams.

Pushing against the tide.

That tries to hold me back.

The tide that tries to control my joy.

The tide that tries to control my fantasy's.

Drowning me in reality.

Letting every day stress'
Control me.

Soon the pressure builds.
Pressing upon my heart.

Until my lungs burn.

Burn for the release;
Of what could be.

If only I let go.

If only I believe in myself.

And all I can be.

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Coltsfan777 commented on UNDER WATER

02-11-2011

hmmm did i see the word liquid dreams in there takes me back to the poem I wrote called liquid dreams, but diff. message.

Poetry is not an expression of the party line. It's that time of night, lying in bed, thinking what you really think, making the private world public, that's what the poet does.

Allen Ginsberg (1926-1997) U.S. poet.

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