Undone
My heart unfolds,revealing tenderness
that cannot be broken.
When we come undone,
your pulse races.
Your eyes are searching,
and my shadow
traces over your skin.
Welcome to the beginning
of the end
for you and I.
By: Brandi Deacon
Undone
6 Comments
Tags: Lust
Poem Commentary
I like someone. It's lust, I'm sure...revealing tenderness
that cannot be broken.
When we come undone,
your pulse races.
Your eyes are searching,
and my shadow
traces over your skin.
Welcome to the beginning
of the end
for you and I.
By: Brandi Deacon
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alexander316 commented on Undone
03-22-2010
- i love your cynical attitude toward love yet your paradoxical desire to pursue it.longing in relationships ahhhh the joy of pain for those such as us.always searching the blues for our red passion. yet love must come from within 1st and then it can be shared.i also like how short the poem is very nice.take a read of mine and let me know what you think.peace
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03/22/2010
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03-19-2010
- My shadow trace over your skin..undone, you make me in gud way..:)
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03/19/2010
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03-19-2010
- Dark and leaves room for the imagination. My favorite type of writes :)
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03/19/2010
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Musicmynded1 commented on Undone
03-18-2010
- You're Young...................... Lust is Good!... if it's gonna produce poetry.... then, let it lust.
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03/19/2010
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