Unexpected

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  • Confusion

    Unexpected

    My brain was scattered,

    Not that it mattered.

    Since no one would believe i tried.

    Tried to do good,

    Believe in what stood,

    Never have I lied.

    Gone is their trust.

    As I do what I must,

    To live an honest life.

    Believe in the good,

    No matter the mood,

    Even while holding the knife.

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    kpeery09 commented on Unexpected

    03-23-2010

    Very Nice, I like the flow, and the rhyming, I give you 10

    WinterFrost commented on Unexpected

    07-05-2009

    A good life? hmm good rhyming scheme like the aabccb style. Nice twisty ending... twisty ending with a knife. Good work BF4

    passionsdance commented on Unexpected

    06-24-2009

    I really liked this . Especially the unexpected end where you are holding a knife lol ... I know what you mean though I have always tried to live a good life ... to be honest ... to believe in good ... however ... doesnt it suck that people like to push others over the edge

    babyfire04

    06/25/2009

    oh yeah! I agree on all points.

    Indigogreen16 commented on Unexpected

    06-11-2009

    very nice piece......i like it very nicely written and elaborate, good job.... keep up th good work......

    Poetry is finer and more philosophical than history; for poetry expresses the universal, and history only the particular.

    Aristotle (384 BC-322 BC) Greek philosopher.

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