unfinished poem

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    More mood than good poetry
    Grieving is so personal - so lonely

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    Two friends of mine - within days apart
    Have lost their loves to awaiting death

    (So empty feels the heart)

    They grieve to know they've heard the last breath
    Yet it is not the end - just a whole new start

    Little comfort are those wedding rites
    and the memories of long ago

    (So lonely will be the night)

    But ever on they each must go
    ever searching for the light


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    dancinghawk commented on unfinished poem

    10-07-2009

    grips my heart ... bravery in the face of ... what is ... beautiful share ...

    Stryx

    10/07/2009

    One Funeral is tomorrow. but life goes on on both sides still...

    Hampton commented on unfinished poem

    10-04-2009

    Very poignant and expressive in its content. Nice write.

    Stryx

    10/05/2009

    Thanks Hampton. One was out of state, the other funeral will be the 8th. I let the subject dictate the style.

    If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

    Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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