Unrequited Love


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I struggled to find something to write about with this poem I felt like writing and looked everywhere for inspiration. i spent about an hour searching the internet and finally i started writing and this one just came out of thin air. Tell me what you think I am iffy on this one

Unrequited Love

I have this pain so deep inside

My heart feels ripped in two

From this pain I can not hide

Because I am so blue

I hope you feel the same

Or at least the same times three

To you this was all a game

Your the one who holds the key

Once you made me love you

And for that I wont forget

The day you said you loved me too

And called me your little pet

Lies are what you made me believe

And to this day it's true

I found out on Christmas Eve

That our love was through

I will miss you for all the yesterdays

And even for tomorrow

I hope this doesnt sound cliche

But I feel such sorrow

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forbiddenlove commented on Unrequited Love


I love it! I am so there at this point in my life. Why do we love those that bring us joy sometimes but misery most of the time?

devaamido commented on Unrequited Love


I think you're right about this one Alexia. It doesn't have the gut-punch impact of your poem about your grandmother. It gives the feeling of something you read rather than something that's true for you from your own life's experience. Gd rhyming & structure though.

Poetry is finer and more philosophical than history; for poetry expresses the universal, and history only the particular.

Aristotle (384 BC-322 BC) Greek philosopher.

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