Walking on the moon

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  • Doubt

    Poem Commentary

    I hope you can see that this is about the longing for another yet you feel you must hold your distance.

    Walking on the moon

      

    The silent’s is mentally terrifying, painful

    I say nothing, for not even my own words return to my ears

    The view is not possible, color that brilliant cannot exist

    Gazing into worship, my focus runs as water

    Though heaven is draped out before me I stand in the dark

     Here

    In darkness I walk freely for I’m not seen

    I feel nothing

    It’s revealed as the silent winds rip at my flesh

    Nothing

    Longing to hold,  (pause)  something, to touch, feel

    Here

    I can reach nothing, grasp nothing

    Hope is a cruel demon; its feeling died long ago

    Only my torment lingers in the dark

    Nothing else exist

     Walking on the moon

    Sounds lovely doesn’t it

     

                                                                                        BY: RJK

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    KtIrish commented on Walking on the moon

    10-29-2009

    Wow, this is really great. I immediatly felt that horrible torturous longing. Definitely a 10 from me.

    icu2 commented on Walking on the moon

    10-29-2009

    Does this really sound lovely to you? Good Gravy...just shoot me now! If you were trying to make the reader feel alone, lost, desolate, and like they are nothing but a gust of hot air, YOU DID IT!!! Good job! ..................TEN!!.....................

    Poetry is not an expression of the party line. It's that time of night, lying in bed, thinking what you really think, making the private world public, that's what the poet does.

    Allen Ginsberg (1926-1997) U.S. poet.

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    To start a kiss 1
    It Could Be Worse 2
    AND YET 2
    The wait can be so long 2
    UNFINISHED 1
    It' the ONE! 4
    i 2
    Walking on the moon 2
    What More Could I Say In A Song 3
    Nothing Left 1
    TO NOT EXIST 1
    OBSERVING WHAT YOU DO 2
    CHRIST’S COMPASSION 3
    I Came A pond A Thought Today 5