We Are Free

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    We Are Free

     Black and white
    Hand in hand
    It's finally time
    So take a stand

    Slavery's gone
    Out of sight
    Now we have
    Both day and night

    Thanks to God
    And Lincoln too
    I am free
    And so are you

    Raise the flag
    Celebrate
    Now's our time
    Don't sit and wait

    Black and white
    Day and night
    We are free
    We stand in sight

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    apacbff commented on We Are Free

    04-24-2011

    I indeed have read some of your poems. They are somewhat genius. My true passion is definetely writing even though I do much more. Honestly, I am the only one in my whole entire family that has a passion for writing. This makes me really proud
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    gmcookie commented on We Are Free

    04-23-2011

    Cool! And you write structured verse as well! This form is almost dead these days. People prefer to write "free verse". That label always makes me wonder - free from what? Free from tradition for sure... hehe
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    apacbff

    04/23/2011

    Honestly, I didnt even know what I was writing. We had an assignment in English to pick out an amendment from the Constitution. I chos Amendment 13 and just threw together a poem

    gmcookie

    04/24/2011

    apacbff, You did a great job on this poem considering your age. The last words in the even numbered lines of each stanza all rhyme. Most of the lines are three syllables long (there are a few exceptions). The emphasized syllables on each line follow a regular pattern (i.e. BLACK and WHITE, HAND in HAND, FINaly TIME, TAKE a STAND). So you can see that every other syllable is emphasized and the lines follow the same basic pattern - the first and last syllables of each line are emphasized. This creates a strong rhythm in the piece which is reinforced by the rhyme scheme. It is also a traditional English language technique. I call it structured verse because each line and each verse follows the same pattern. A university professor might call it "rhyming accentual syllabic prosody". Rhyming for obvious reasons, accentual because it bases its rhythm on the natural patterns of accented and unaccented syllables. Syllabic because the number of syllables in each line match from one verse to the next. Prosody is just a fancy name for the structure of a poem. So you see, you did it by instinct. I'd say that those are the instincts of a poet. You should keep writing kiddo. By the way, I write this way as well... Read a few of my poems and you'll see what I mean. hehe

    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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