Where thoughts will take you

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    I wrote this during my Slam Poetry class in May of 2010.

    Where thoughts will take you

    Listening to the dead silence
    Nothing stirring but a light wind
    I hear the neighbor's windmill
    Making it's screcking sound from rusty limbs
    Needing oil...like a walking tin man
    Like the clone of the one that followed Dorothy

    Huricane winds take the place of the soft crying wind
    The tree's arms begin to sway
    Until they break with a snap
    That tree won't bleed
    But will stand in pain until it heals
    If it will ever heal

    The powerful spark of Zeus cut straight through
    Seperating the tree's heart in two
    The black wound severed by intense sharp fire
    Was anyone around to see?

    This poor tree damaged and dying
    It's moaning as the wind rips through it's once strong form
    Beating its weak body to the ground it was rooted
    Is anyone around?
    Or are they under the sheltered roof of their home?
    Oblivious.

    It's damaged bark will become its own tombstone
    Unless it's used for the paper we write on
    We know that but do we ever really think about it?
    That same poor tree is what you're writing on
    You are adding scars to his corpsed body
    More than Zeus's strike

    It all started with a tree
    Which came from a seed a little bigger than ants
    Their bodies dragging through the ground that we stand
    Stand,
    Stand,
    Stand,
    Chanting through the wind

    But I am back listening to the dead silence
    Nothing stirring but a light wind

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    The true philosopher and the true poet are one, and a beauty, which is truth, and a truth, which is beauty, is the aim of both.

    Ralph Waldo Emerson, American Poet (1803-1882)

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