Whirling

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Whirling

by Tom King

I hear it first, then feel it;
The cool rush and whirl of dry leaves
Spun up on errant zephyrs,
Dancing in the face of the onrushing storm.

The very air is transformed - green and thick
The weather wizards waving magic wands.
Hocus and Pocus and the first cold drops
Spatter against my forearms.

The dog pulls at her chain turning back toward home,
Knowing what's coming;
And puzzled that I seem not to,
She nips at my hand to pull me along.

Stubborn me, I step deliberately
Oh sure, I've turned for home, but still
It's only rain and thunder and I'm sure,
That I would not mind a wetting.

But for Daisy's sake I step it up,
The hush of rushing rain behind.
Then trees gasping overhead as we are doused
Two steps shy of the porch and shelter.

The dog shakes off the rain and frowns at me,
Before she comes to stand pressed tight
Against my leg to watch the storm.
I laugh and Daisy grins, safe and sort of dry.

(c) 2010

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HarverTomsson commented on Whirling

12-31-2010

The man who ignores his dog's wisdom does so at his own risk. Well crafted ballad in quatrain clothes. Harv

Olan01 commented on Whirling

12-30-2010

Writing about a stroll through whispering breezes, a dog and a down poor show a very keen skill, well done. Love, peace and freedom, Olan.

twayneking

12/31/2010

Thank you for your kind comment.

Kanicki commented on Whirling

12-07-2010

A lovely write and very entertaining. your use of metaphors are great.

In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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