Whitetail Life

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    I am no literary guru, but I tried to work this challenge out. Hope I made it. If anyone sees where I failed in any of these requirements, please point that out to me. Thank you.

    Marcus

    Whitetail Life

     Rustling leaves...
    A doe lifts head
    Subsist by danger
    Warned by breeze
    Deer snort and run

    Marcus Lewis
    6/18/2009

    Written in response to forum post by FindingJune: Less is More.

    Easy: 1) Must be 5 lines
              2) Cannot contain pronouns
              3) Must have a nature reference

    Med.  1) Must contain easy requirements and no adjectives.

    Hard 1) Must contain easy and medium requirements and no 
                 adverbs.

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    MSVanallen commented on Whitetail Life

    07-12-2009

    I must say I am impressed by anyone who can write within the confines of rules...you really have a knack for it. My pen is too unruly. Great job. MSV
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    UnworthyFather

    07/13/2009

    Thanks, MSV. These were hard rules to adhere to. Thanks

    jademelissa74 commented on Whitetail Life

    07-02-2009

    Simply PERFECT! Nothing else to add! :)) .
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    UnworthyFather

    07/02/2009

    Thanks, Erika! You are so kind. Thanks for reading and for your kind words.

    StandingBear commented on Whitetail Life

    06-25-2009

    A great take on less is more. ------------------------------------- -------------------------------- Nice write.
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    UnworthyFather

    06/27/2009

    Thank you very much, Mike.

    ginga commented on Whitetail Life

    06-20-2009

    Great description. Short and powerful. The deer would appreciate your write. Ginga
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    UnworthyFather

    06/20/2009

    Thank you very much, Ginga for your comments.

    wheelsal commented on Whitetail Life

    06-20-2009

    Marcus you have done it again. When will you change your name to worthy. Hope you try another one soon.
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    UnworthyFather

    06/20/2009

    Thank you very much, Wheelsal, for your very kind words. They mean much to me. Thank you.

    When power leads man towards arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the area of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.

    John F. Kennedy (1917-1963) Thirty-fifth President of the USA

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