WIDOWS WALK

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    Just a note before reading; I was trying to capture the essence of the main character; woman in this piece was supposed to be a ghost.  so please keep that in mind when reading.

    WIDOWS WALK

    Soft whispers of what used to be,
    quietly shifting across the room.
    Only her essence remains.

    No longer a solid vision,
    yet in the rarest of moments,
    one may see her alarming beauty,
    the haunted look in her eyes.

    So brief a glimpse,
    the seer may feel,
    it was but a trick of the light.

    Surely the vision could not be real.

    The sorrow filled look;
    the agony briefly glimpsed.

    The heart wrenching cries that come in the night.

    Cries of loss;
    that twist the heart
    of even,
    the most uncompassionate of souls.

    One can only guess;
    at what she suffered.

    How her loss of  love;
     to the sea.

    Leaving her to frequent;
    the widows walk.

    Few may even shudder  and feel her anguish;
    as they watch her plunge from the walk.

    No longer willing to live,
    without her love.

    Feeling only in death;
    can she be one with him again.

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    knight4696 commented on WIDOWS WALK

    01-27-2010

    Angel - Like a trip back to days gone by .. Love the nautical theme and the longing you emote in this piece. Nice work! :) Ken

    koolmom0 commented on WIDOWS WALK

    10-28-2009

    This is beautiful and very touching. Til death do us part. Loved it hun. Love Koolmom

    rougepriest commented on WIDOWS WALK

    10-28-2009

    hmmm interesting ghost poem, seems like the haunting may be more psychological that visceral, one thing im confused about is this line---Few may even shutter---are you saying that few have been able to get her picture on film or that they shudder when they walk where she jumped from? great poem though

    Rygar commented on WIDOWS WALK

    10-26-2009

    very touching piece hun, it seems like a personal thing almost although i dont know if any loves lost to the sea. good read :)

    kochab commented on WIDOWS WALK

    10-26-2009

    very interesting. Makes me wonder who this man is that your writing about and perhaps what woman as well (though it seems told from your own eyes as the writer). As a piece of some advice Id suggest only trying to do this as the sole improvement the piece might be able to use. The single lines or 2 short lines with a rhyme in there to carry the feeling of the poem, try to combine those with each other and the surrounding bits like them to make one stanza put together. I think your poems would be much stronger that way AM2, They already carry such a strong message from the heart that they are undeniably good, but I think you can help show that better with some practice too ^_^

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