Winver VS sumer && Thunder VS lighting

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    Winver VS sumer && Thunder VS lighting

    Winter

    Freezing as i walk
    Ice cold wind hits my face
    snow beging to fall


    Summer


    Playing volleyball
    with sun shinning in my face
    tired by the heat


    Thunder

    Invisible noise
    comes from the skies above
    Strong and powerful

    Lighting

    Bright light in the sky
    Untouchable streak of white
    Silent but fierce

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    spbsdude commented on Winver VS sumer && Thunder VS lighting

    12-13-2010

    Some very vivid images here, but it seems somewhat incomplete. I would have liked to hear about Spring and Fall as well and a little more on each season would be nice. Think of all the things that remind you of each season and let it pour out on the page. Don't worry about the order or the punctuation, you can fix that in the editing phase. Still a nice succinct poem.

    AshleyyBabyy

    12/14/2010

    I can redo it. It was just a Creative Writing project. I did it exactly how she told me to. (Teacher) It was longer and im my opinion much better but she told me to cut stuff out...

    Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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