within these flames

12 Comments

within these flames

i set fire to my soul to scorch the pain
never thought it would burn out of control
thought i could keep myself refrained
but what i find is what i didnt know


i stepped into the fire thinking it was for the best
but only found i couldnt escape
the pain of memories ive tried to forget
smolder in front of my face


inhaling fire into my lungs
my chest burns with every breath
second guessing the things ive done
as fire rages in my chest


the who and what of where and when
melt together in my brain
the things i know and where ive been
strike with increasing pain


the fire burns within the dark
it flickers to light my path
the rising flames engross my heart
and charr it to a sullen black


the loss of self within these flames
singe away the who i am
so in the fire i still remain
surviving the best i can

 

Poem Comments

(12)

Please login or register

You must be logged in or register a new account in order to
leave comments/feedback and rate this poem.

Login or Register

Olan01 commented on within these flames

09-20-2010

Another wonderful poem from the pen of Dano. It reminds me of my poem about the individuation process. Great work.

Dano

09/27/2010

thanks olan

Olan01

09/27/2010

Congrats on you win. It is well deserved.

Springsize commented on within these flames

09-14-2010

You begin this poem, bringing Reader into your experience, a self-inflicted burning to destroy the pain, as if it were a cancerous or foul form... your use of the metaphor, a back fire is acute... and frightening, as you find yourself in the midst of that which you wanted to alleviate from your thinking... seemingly surrounding by the foul... Your use of the "blackened heart" was a knife of an impact here... struck hard... and your ending to survive in the midst of all this "as best you can"... is so REAL... as that is exactly how it feels, at least to me, sometimes... All in all, the mechanics of this poem are good and the Intent evokes just a smidgeon of the pain emanating...

Dano

09/14/2010

thanks so much for such kind words...

Oblaidon commented on within these flames

09-02-2010

I saw your "Read My Poetry" post from the forum. Hmmmm, good write. It seems to me you are talking about hell. Well, that is what I get from it. I give it a 10. Nice job.

Dano

09/02/2010

it hell of sorts... thanks for taking the time to read and comment...

JadedJezzabel commented on within these flames

08-29-2010

the honesty in the way you write touches me in a place i keep locked up.......very few even know its there much less have broken in....yet the beauty in your thoughts and words seek it out and find it wide open. words can not express how much i love and relate to this poem.

Dano

08/30/2010

i am glad that my poetry has touched you but i am also sorry that you can relate to it...

Teardrops commented on within these flames

08-28-2010

You have to stop second guessing what has already come and gone you can't bring back the past the future is being written and today is what must be the time . Now we can correct and re-do to make the future a thing we love and look forward too . Great poem well written and a winner in my book Marie

Dano

08/30/2010

thanks marie

When power leads man towards arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the area of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.

John F. Kennedy (1917-1963) Thirty-fifth President of the USA

Dano’s Poems (150)

Title Comments
Title Comments
from an angels view 19
searching the darkness 10
a letter from santa 14
thanksgiving (acrostic) 12
the depth of... 11
ive wished 7
absentee 12
this is... 13
a journey into the dark 7
the cold of november 14
your voice 12
the yin to the yang 14
twisted 9
autumn 14
i think it happened again 11
luna~tic 19
the darkness 13
a blinding eclipse 16
the universe... 18
the wind of sorrow 14
my sorrow weeps 16
where but the dark... 12
immortal kiss 47
in a darkened room 17
our mother 7
within these flames 12
nocturnal (acrostic) classic rock 7
behind wrought iron bars 25
what i write (part 2) 8
today 17
the world in grey 6
the reality of... 5
in the shadow of a mountain 6
nothing will ever be the same 10
of cemetary dreams (and nightmare scapes) 12
next to a bed... 18
but... 15
at a funeral 12
seventeen (acrostic) 11
the fortunate one(s) 7
what did i do... 24
ashes to dust 45
dancing in the moonlight 14
disempowering the pain 14
the butterfly 10
what i write 14
sorry (i killed the after glow) 11
the humidity rises (an erotic tale) 9
pieces of light 8
the sad pumpkin &... 9
my face 12
for a long time... 14
(an explination of) distractions 6
tell me... 6
the charelston cookie tin 9
silent self destruction 8
exposed 13
the means of the day (a true valentines poem) 2
a poem about nothing... 8
blood bleeds black 7
dissecting myself 3
i will be just fine 3
the stacking of bricks 3
the complexities of depression... 4
spirits & ghosts 3
**random chaos** 2
bloodlust 3
...somethings missing... 2
15 years... 3
beauty sleeps entombed (parts 1 & 2) 3
**untitled** 2
the overstuffed closet 3
the candy dish 2
anxiety speaks 2
**untitled** 2
myself and the light 6
the fog 2
fire and tears 3
cerebral meltdown 3
sometimes i wish... 1
drawing strength from a starr... 2
disappointmen
t...
1
**untitled** 1
the flower garden 3
nature... 1
reaching out 2
the dark and the light... 1
the insistent demon 2
sorry... 3
forgive me lover... (parts 1 & 2) 2
im so sorry... 3
**no title... just random thoughts** 1
to eternity... 2
winter wind whips... 1
tired 2
lucid dream 1
the rains came... 2
the mourning light 1
another jagged pill 1
i just cant... 1
entitlement?!
?!?
1
entitlement!!
!!
1
burning within 4
inside of me 1
projected pain 1
the night... the dakness & the truth? 1
panic 2
the mourning fog 1
when the fires burn 1
through the night 1
shadow casts 0
a mournful rain 1
i cant protect me 2
my comfort place 0
an echo shifts 1
the monster 2
welcome to my life 0
the past is alive... 1
... 1
standing on the edge 2
my smile... 1
anxiety 2
my reality 0
another view... 0
untitled... 0
jagged pill 2
in the dark 1
what to do 1
how can i... 1
life... 3
a crust of pain 1
keeping me weak... 2
my dark world 3
another night of wondering 2
in the attic 4
i hold most dear 2
the me inside of me 2
another day 1
dreamed in a dream 2
a year in the life (dealing with death) 1
i look... 1
where my secrets are kept 1
a mouthful of words 2
i will not fear (when my eyes are blind) 2
i am aware (i'm already dead) 7
standing in the silence of my own shadow... 3
a blinding dark 1
growing pain 3
the longest of nights 5
... 7