You Offend Me

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    You Offend Me

    I’m offended by your presence you provoke
    me with a smile
    I felt you as you chose me all my senses went so wild
    I am not interested in meeting you I feel your body draw me nigh
    I hear you voice sing out to me from deep inside your thigh
    I will not turn around to see what makes me feel so good
    Cause when I smelled you soft sweet scent my plight was understood
    I vision you in all my dreams your being has form and shape
    But if I leave now my heart will frown but at least I will escape
    But right now while I still can choose to reject what is fate
    Lover to lover I must admit that I want you on my plate

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    BrittKun commented on You Offend Me

    11-20-2009

    I understand temtation. It is sometimes very hard to say no to somethim\ngs but be strong in God. Exelent poem needs a little work on the flow of the words. But still the concept ins very strong.

    LadyEniAnah commented on You Offend Me

    11-19-2009

    wow very good.. a love hate thing going on there as i see it... every well put

    Luscious40 commented on You Offend Me

    10-29-2009

    I loooooved this poem, mainly because I can read between the lines. Been there before.. I just made a choice.. Great poem.

    christliked

    11/05/2009

    Not all people can read between the line and realize that I want your emotions and good stories are not always truth or even suppose to be, thank you

    BoSweets commented on You Offend Me

    10-29-2009

    This is a very nice love poem.... thanks Peace BoSweets

    RJK commented on You Offend Me

    10-26-2009

    Well this comment thing gets hard some times. I think you had a chance to write something very personal yet giving us a peek at a first incounter. But I belive youended up going left of that. I would say go back and try it again. Not dising you just think it could be so much more. Good luck.

    christliked

    10/26/2009

    dont always measure styles based on your own and try to expand your understanding this poem is very simple and you missed it, I suggest you read Your So Vain

    When power leads man towards arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the area of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.

    John F. Kennedy (1917-1963) Thirty-fifth President of the USA

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