You Were Right

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    You Were Right

     

    You were right about the world about its opinion,

     

    the over look, pretentious to the core.

     

    A sky of hurt lingers beyond the seas with cram waters still

     

    the fishes are not friendly.

     

    The salt are simply the words that corrupts like having a seed of sin,

     

    You were right.

     

    The sea needs attention even if it hurts deep below the surface; it’s only a salt

     

    Lake crying for help trying to be a sea.

     

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    PaulJ commented on You Were Right

    07-07-2009

    a lot of metaphors...You can feel the poem and its a good one, keep it up

    BooTz commented on You Were Right

    06-30-2009

    wow!...a very powerful piece. i love it! u can see the poem & not just feel it...great piece!

    Crush commented on You Were Right

    06-29-2009

    Very nice, man. You got a gift of emotion. Thanks.

    photochick commented on You Were Right

    06-28-2009

    love the poem very deep and can have many different meanings thanks for the great writing I look forward to reading more of your stuff nice to see another young deep passion filled writer

    sammia commented on You Were Right

    06-28-2009

    You have me on my toes thinking...this is a great write...I like it and keep writing..very good

    If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

    Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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