the other side....revised

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  • ApaqRasgirl
  • Back online after loosing internet for a long time. I am very happy to finally be back with all my friends and I hope to de writing and posting soon. Love Asha

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the other side....revised


What is this I feel now calling
Darkness above
Anything at all inside
I hear your voice calling my heart
Void of Life
Yet I feel your arms around me
Tightening O'glove
Making love
From the other side

But it does not matter how I feel
For your heaven's a lie
I feel your voice within
A knife of cold steel
Release me from your cursed repeal
Set me free from the other side

You call me in the night
Your breath upon the skin of dark’s bride
I call you in my heart, without fight
Nightly, bringing such misery to life
You're moving on the other side

Your love calls my death
Haunting my dreams at night
"I'm not alone," calls my last breath
We’ll never be apart in death
My tears follow on the other side

I cried aloud
Trying to free my heart
All my tears have dried
You moved to the dark, forever apart
Feel my love calling you to start again
Darkness drowning me
From the other side

As I ramble on this piece of paper
Haunting lyrics of our love to decide
Feeling your arms, sweet heavenly rapture
Trapped inside your smothering vapor
Falling, falling, taking me to the other side

You are closing my eyes
Leaving darkness
Your love disguised
Feeling your veins surround my heart
Embracing tightly, trapping the dark
Dragging me down
To the other side
To the dark side

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devaamido commented on the other side....revised

10-16-2010

Sweety, What you need is new friends! It's fun to play around with this kind of stuff but you sure don't want to let anybody who lives "on the dim-lit side of town" to get any kind of hooks into you...and beware, they'll try 'em all. Good write!

ApaqRasgirl

10/16/2010

thank you for the nice comment dear, I am glad that you enjoyed it. I hope you like my first write on the dark side called "the night calls" the ending will surprise you.........haha.........love asha

Hampton commented on the other side....revised

10-15-2010

A journey to the other side is not one to be taken lightly. if one succombs to the beckoning call of a lost love then one must ready ones self for a trip into the unimaginable. Well written.

ApaqRasgirl

10/15/2010

thank you dear, I am glad that you enjoyed it.......love asha

Olan01 commented on the other side....revised

10-14-2010

Ah, my sweet Asha; I love this dark write of inner an emotional tug-of-war. It was John Cash who wrote, "Because you’re Mine I Walk the Line." In a sense we all walk the line between darkness and light. Love, peace and freedom, Olan

ApaqRasgirl

10/14/2010

thank you dear heart for that sweet comment. I am glad you liked it. have you read my first write on the dark side. "the night calls".....I think you will like it and will get a surprise at the end....hehe........loves ya asha

mustascheman commented on the other side....revised

10-14-2010

Interesting...I see you are curious about the 'other side'...so much so that you would willingly give yourself to the darkness in such an intimate way. It is true what is said, sometimes some things are better in the dark. LOL

ApaqRasgirl

10/14/2010

haha.....how very true...grins....thank you dear for the sweet comment.....this was my second attempt on writing on the dark side. my first one is called "The Night Calls"...I hope you enjoy it as well, the ending will give you something special.......love asha

dancinghawk commented on the other side....revised

10-12-2010

nice release, ApaqRasgirl! "Darkness drowning me, from the other side" ... it is amazing how powerful the vampires in our lives can be ... -dh

ApaqRasgirl

10/12/2010

thank you dear for the sweet comment, I am glad you enjoyed it.....love asha

If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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