YOUR "I"s (c) Copyright 2009

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For the arrogant people we've all encountered at some point in our lives...

YOUR "I"s (c) Copyright 2009

It's "I did this" and "I did that"
That's the problem with "I" as a matter of fact
Always tooting your own little horn
Never letting others' opinions form

Your "I"s are getting big and so is your head
While the "U"s in the crowd fade to the background instead
Placing yourself on a pedestal in the sky
You'll wind up alone, drunk off that arrogance high

Constantly patting yourself on the back
Makes it evident humility is something you lack
We know you've got talent, we know you've got gifts
You've made that quite clear, if you get my drift

Be quiet already, let your works speak for you
Conceit is getting old, please try something new
Try giving praise to others around you
Giving just honor where honor is due

Then the "I"s and the "U"s might begin to mesh
And no one will feel greater, no one will feel less
Those on a high horse could come down and mingle
And the bells of concordance might start to jingle

Is it true the "I"s have it?
Don't second that motion
The "U"s are in the running
And seeking promotion

"WE" is a better word, a harmonious union
Where the "I"s and the "U"s can share sweet communion.


(c) Copyright 2009 Melanie D. West

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MalikPeterson commented on YOUR "I"s (c) Copyright 2009

03-13-2010

Again we share a similar wavelength...especially with the up in the air bit...mine was from the perspective of a first class flyer...though with a different tone after that. I like this one. It is a staunch reminder that humility is always best. No matter how good you may be..or think you may be...it is always better to let your horn tooter...not be of the same name. This is an excellent sentiment. So..."I" want to give "U" some kudos :)

mdpoetgirl

03/13/2010

lol, thanks again for reading ;-)

jademelissa74 commented on YOUR "I"s (c) Copyright 2009

03-11-2010

What an amazing poem you have managed to craft! Wow! I loved every line, every stanza, every word :)) "Let your work speak for itself" YES, YES, YES!!!!! This is beautiful and simply precious...PROFOUND! How could I have missed this?? You never cease to amaze me. Thank you! Love ya~

mdpoetgirl

03/11/2010

This one is often overlooked, so glad it caught your eye ;-)

Chrisjan commented on YOUR "I"s (c) Copyright 2009

06-01-2009

That was an awesome play on letters. How you crafted the visual "i" Next was "u". Then "we" made the letters,share equally. That wa really sweet. Thank you for sharing.

mdpoetgirl

06/01/2009

Thanks, Chris! Can't stand it when ppl toot their own horns all the time... that's where this one came from.

To have great poets there must be great audiences too.

Walt Whitman, American Poet (1819-1892)