Channeling The Flow
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Channeling The FlowThere are a good number of wordsmiths and free thinkers in this note-worthy poetry site. Papa should be proud of what he's gathered here.We should by all means be ready to help each other improve our craft and as is the case with most of us, the desire to invest more time and focus on writing is resident within our souls. I would like to see myself giving back into this place what ever creative insight God has blessed me with. I 've been getting folks asking to critique their work from time. I'd like to do that, but let's channel the flow into this thread which I can more easily monitor. Bless you. Last edited by NevillePark 03-22-2010 at 06:41:19 PM |
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Sonnets anyone?There will be others here establishing formats of approach; lessons and exercises to work on together. I have no formal education which qualifies me for anything at all. Regardless I have some useful insights from time to time and I strive to implement proper grammatical structure in whatever I write. I think we can all eventually learn to get into the swing of things in giving and receiving constructive advice as long as we know that's the freedom we have. Meanwhile I'd like to start a project. I've wondered about writing a SONNET. I was on a site yesterday on the Sonnets of Shakespeare. I'll share more, but let's gear up to write one this week. Google sonnet and start constructing.~NevillePark |
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RE: Channeling The Flow
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RE: Sonnets anyone?Quote: Originally Posted by NevillePark There will be others here establishing formats of approach; lessons and exercises to work on together. I have no formal education which qualifies me for anything at all. Regardless I have some useful insights from time to time and I strive to implement proper grammatical structure in whatever I write. I think we can all eventually learn to get into the swing of things in giving and receiving constructive advice as long as we know that's the freedom we have. Meanwhile I'd like to start a project. I've wondered about writing a SONNET. I was on a site yesterday on the Sonnets of Shakespeare. I'll share more, but let's gear up to write one this week. Google sonnet and start constructing.~NevillePark I've posted several sonnets, if you'd like to take a look. some of them are plainly called "sonnet 3" or "...4", some have names. "If words could weave a fisher's net" is a sonnet with a couplet finishing it off. Ole' Willy was the sonnet master, but the language can be tough (or that just could be my youth talking). |
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RE: Channeling The FlowI'm here for class, Brother Neville! |
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RE: Channeling The FlowI've been wanting to try my hand at this for a while now. But I don't know, all my attempts have either turned out totally different or fell flat. |
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TIPS - (Somewhere around 10 or 15 percent ?)I believe in thoughtful content and deliberate clarity as being key elements with written communication ... if only to stave off the clouds of confusion and ambiguity. It's been a tradition in classrooms since forever to "find your own meaning" with the classic works. We tend to want to pick the authors brain in postmortem fashion.There likely is justifiable cause with most- because the order of things was different "back then" as well as having details hard to come by. Weaving word puzzles into a work is a big part of the enjoyment for both the reader and the writer. However there's a line I believe which when crossed, a writer excludes the reader by "hoarding understanding" ... something in the order of having an inside joke. I believe anything written can be mysterious and at the same time user friendly. It's a big part we play in making sure we avoid reader confusion with word choices that don't aptly describe, or have neglected to check spelling and proper phrasing. Last edited by NevillePark 03-26-2010 at 11:36:58 PM |
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RE: RE: Channeling The FlowQuote: **************************************************************************Heh-heh-heh! 
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RE: RE: Sonnets anyone?Quote: Originally Posted by BDIsernhagen Originally Posted by NevillePark There will be others here establishing formats of approach; lessons and exercises to work on together. I have no formal education which qualifies me for anything at all. Regardless I have some useful insights from time to time and I strive to implement proper grammatical structure in whatever I write. I think we can all eventually learn to get into the swing of things in giving and receiving constructive advice as long as we know that's the freedom we have. Meanwhile I'd like to start a project. I've wondered about writing a SONNET. I was on a site yesterday on the Sonnets of Shakespeare. I'll share more, but let's gear up to write one this week. Google sonnet and start constructing.~NevillePark I've posted several sonnets, if you'd like to take a look. some of them are plainly called "sonnet 3" or "...4", some have names. "If words could weave a fisher's net" is a sonnet with a couplet finishing it off. Ole' Willy was the sonnet master, but the language can be tough (or that just could be my youth talking). Tell you what my man! I can take lessons from you any day. I'm hoping to see you pitch in and help where you see the need. I'll check out your offerings. You're away ahead of most everyone - Drop in your best as a reference point for us all. |
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RE: RE: Channeling The FlowQuote: Originally Posted by KtIrish I've been wanting to try my hand at this for a while now. But I don't know, all my attempts have either turned out totally different or fell flat. Count me in. **************************************************************** You can do it ... Yes you can! (repeat, repeat in cheer leading style) |
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RE: RE: Channeling The FlowQuote: Originally Posted by WordSlinger  , Neville, for starters I need a window seat, left front, I need the view of the Trees, and Animals. Yes the one near the pencil sharpener,  .Happy to be here, and I know who else that is Happy that you are here, but she's late for class, lol. Sonnet, alrighty then, oh that's Leroy, he wants a seat in the back. He's good you'll love him. John E WordSlinger ********************************************************************** So folks - - WS is over there, If you pass your dull pencils over to him he'll sharpen them for you. Coffee break is at 10:30 AM. |
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Sonnet 0Here is my sonnet. The meter may be a little different from what a Shakesperean sonnet should be, but there some latitude permitted in a Shakesperean sonnet. The imagery is taken from Psalm 133, and the idiomatic ''baby'' could be replaced with the word ''lover''. This is my contribution to the world of ''viagra'' poetry! LOL What do you think? |
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RE: Sonnet 0Sonnet 0 Last edited by NevillePark 03-24-2010 at 11:11:44 PM |
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RE: Channeling The FlowQuote: Originally Posted by NevillePark There are a good number of wordsmiths and free thinkers in this note-worthy poetry site. Papa should be proud of what he's gathered here.We should by all means be ready to help each other improve our craft and as is the case with most of us, the desire to invest more time and focus on writing is resident within our souls. I would like to see myself giving back into this place what ever creative insight God has blessed me with. I 've been getting folks asking to critique their work from time. I'd like to do that, but let's channel the flow into this thread which I can more easily monitor. Bless you.   Hi, Neville, I pray I find you doing very well. I love what you have written here. Please peruse and edit. Cool runnin's, Friend. |
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RE: Sonnets anyone?Quote: Originally Posted by NevillePark There will be others here establishing formats of approach; lessons and exercises to work on together. I have no formal education which qualifies me for anything at all. Regardless I have some useful insights from time to time and I strive to implement proper grammatical structure in whatever I write. I think we can all eventually learn to get into the swing of things in giving and receiving constructive advice as long as we know that's the freedom we have. Meanwhile I'd like to start a project. I've wondered about writing a SONNET. I was on a site yesterday on the Sonnets of Shakespeare. I'll share more, but let's gear up to write one this week. Google sonnet and start constructing.~NevillePark GREETINGS, Neville I love what you are saying and doing here. As soon as I get a bag of prose off my back, I'll be coming aboard...... 
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RE: RE: Sonnets anyone?Quote: Originally Posted by BDIsernhagen Originally Posted by NevillePark There will be others here establishing formats of approach; lessons and exercises to work on together. I have no formal education which qualifies me for anything at all. Regardless I have some useful insights from time to time and I strive to implement proper grammatical structure in whatever I write. I think we can all eventually learn to get into the swing of things in giving and receiving constructive advice as long as we know that's the freedom we have. Meanwhile I'd like to start a project. I've wondered about writing a SONNET. I was on a site yesterday on the Sonnets of Shakespeare. I'll share more, but let's gear up to write one this week. Google sonnet and start constructing.~NevillePark Hi, Brett, I plan to read, :"If Words I've posted several sonnets, if you'd like to take a look. some of them are plainly called "sonnet 3" or "...4", some have names. "If words could weave a fisher's net" is a sonnet with a couplet finishing it off. Ole' Willy was the sonnet master, but the language can be tough (or that just could be my youth talking). Hi, Brett, I plan to read, "If Words Could Weave A Fisher's Net," this weekend. Chau. |
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RE: RE: Channeling The FlowQuote: Kabbalitic, Kabbalistic, The Teacher attending class! That's what I call progress! I'll sit beside you, Welcome! No chatting in the class, only listening, asking and answering questions, thinking and absorbing.....
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RE: Sonnets anyone?Quote: Originally Posted by NevillePark There will be others here establishing formats of approach; lessons and exercises to work on together. I have no formal education which qualifies me for anything at all. Regardless I have some useful insights from time to time and I strive to implement proper grammatical structure in whatever I write. I think we can all eventually learn to get into the swing of things in giving and receiving constructive advice as long as we know that's the freedom we have. Meanwhile I'd like to start a project. I've wondered about writing a SONNET. I was on a site yesterday on the Sonnets of Shakespeare. I'll share more, but let's gear up to write one this week. Google sonnet and start constructing.~NevillePark THIS IS GREAT! I shall come aboard , as soon as I get a bag of prose off my back.......
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RE: RE: Channeling The FlowQuote: RAIN OR SHINE, NEVER BE LATE FOR CLASS!.......... No chatting in class either only asking and answering questions, listening, thinking and absorbing. You may play the role of teacher, when the teacher is not around. Of course, ideas from students are encouraged, as evidence that you are eager to learn or to share what you know....... 
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RE: RE: Channeling The FlowQuote: Originally Posted by KtIrish I've been wanting to try my hand at this for a while now. But I don't know, all my attempts have either turned out totally different or fell flat. Count me in. Hi, Kt, Long time no see! Can I sit next to you in class? Love you. |
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RE: TIPS - (Somewhere around 10 or 15 percent ?)Quote: Originally Posted by NevillePark I believe in thoughtful content and deliberate clarity as being key elements with written communication ... if only to stave off the clouds of confusion and ambiguity. It's been a tradition in classrooms since forever to "find your own meaning" with the classic works. We tend to want to pick the authors brain in postmortem fashion.There likely is justifiable cause with most- because the order of things was different "back then" as well as having details hard to come by. Weaving word puzzles into a work is a big part of the enjoyment for both the reader and the writer. However there's a line I believe which when crossed, a writer excludes the reader by "hoarding understanding" ... something in the order of having an inside joke. I believe anything written can be mysterious and at the same time user friendly. It's a big part we play in making sure we ban confusion with word choices that aptly describe and spelling or phrasing that doesn't mislead or is aimless in it's function. - Any rebuttals on the subject? Neville, this, your mission statement is erudite, and clearly well written. It is very explicit. However , please re-read and edit your last sentence: It's a big part .....etc........
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RE: The Poetry of John E WordSlingerQuote: Originally Posted by WordSlinger All of My Assignments/Poems shall be posted in this same section, so check back, also they will be on the same link page below to comment/grade on, thankl you very much, WS --------------------------- Poem 0 Assignment:Sonnet THE OFFICE OF FIRE Let the ice open your eyes to doth thaw, So numbers tell a new posted story. Get a good look at the sky iron flaw, So our science plays with our God glory. Our time now, they cry out is short and slim, And most mouths are filled with a loved substance; And lost foreclosure maybe the earths’ grim , Drenching the fabrics on our backs, financed; But they have the answers bottled in schools, For the janitors really are the yank, Nor shall anyone of us change the rules, Because they the porters know what we’ve sank, So in the name of saving all, our life, Sectors are justified by paper knifes. ----------------------------------------------- Poem 1 ------------------------------------ A Renegades Rhythm of Remorse People, Last night an Angel on the moon slept The morning came, and the birds sang; And I listened, but something was in lack Upon my opened eyes the phone had rang, A friend said, a friend committed suicide; My day turned so black Then I heard the sound, a pound from the ground, I knew he wanted back People, Tonight an Angel on the moon shall dream On beckon call, but hear no bang; And now I know, that someone is in slack A neighbor, a neighbor who could have sang; Their day turned so black Again I’ll hear the sound, A pound from the ground, There’s no turning back ------------------------------------------------------ Poem 2 Time Wears High Heels Whoo, time is naked, and so sexy; time wears high heels, baby The whole nest is in hock, everything from tree to tree Signs of it are in every flock, the ground is out of seed Whoo, the whole nest is now in line, worms think birds are a crime Eagles wont tell you that because they can’t, deceitful birds We are just at the beginning of an implant, smile for time Whoo, so you the brave wanted Change, well you got it, 7 years for 7 years, Time repeats itself, so queer Keep your faith, and to those you can surely spot it Yes, to question it’s character, We’re afraid that it is no charade Time is so pretty, if you look, Awe, so sweet, it has braids Let us grasp them, and all time is up in the air, for us to share Whoo, not to mention its sexy legs, come here, let us fertilize your eggs The whole world wants a shot, that’s right, we think you’re hot You may think this is out place, but we’re not so, like two faced Time, that’s because you just keep coming and coming Well if you want us to be a good Father Then your going to have to be a good Mother ----------------------------------------------------------- Thank You, John E WordSlinger Comment - Critique Poema Linkz Poem-0 http://www.originalpoetry.com/the-office-of-fire-sonnet Poem-1 http://www.originalpoetry.com/a-renegades-rhythm-of-remorse Poem-3 http://www.originalpoetry.com/time-wears-high-heels Here are the Sources: http://www.dummies.com/how-to/content/writing-a-sonnet.htm http://www.poeticbyway.com/glossary.html -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Poem entertainment, these 2 poems are mini movies: Please take a read at break, and comment: http://www.originalpoetry.com/farewell-to-the-weeping-rose http://www.originalpoetry.com/tale-of-a-romantic I need time to read and read these cryptic and masterly lines on Time. They cannor be browsed. They must be chewed on and slowly ingested. |
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RE: Sonnet 0Quote: Originally Posted by kabbalistic Here is my sonnet. The meter may be a little different from what a Shakesperean sonnet should be, but there some latitude permitted in a Shakesperean sonnet. The imagery is taken from Psalm 133, and the idiomatic ''baby'' could be replaced with the word ''lover''. This is my contribution to the world of ''viagra'' poetry! LOL What do you think? Sonnet 0 A votive offering at your altar, Of manly, egocentric pride; A sacrifice I make in earnest, Oh baby, let me come inside! The sweet annointing of your bosom. Down my garments to my feet; The burning embers of your passion, I bow before your mercy seat. Too long you've left me in this dungeon; Too distant to be satisfied; The raging passion overcoming, Hope deferred and love denied; Enflamed I am with raging passion, Oh baby, let me come inside! This is a delectable sonnet adhering to the Petrarchan mode - an octave plus a sestet. The theme can be lighty-hearted or declamatory, suggesting an appeal to a lover,as in this sonnet. There should be no division into two stanzas. The sonnet is a composite whole of fourteen lines. However, remedy this, Kabbaliistic , and go to the top of the class....
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A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness. It finds the thought and the thought finds the words.
Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.