A Heir of Land

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  • Fantasy
    • CailOfTarnak
    • Cail is at the start of his story just begining with many changes to come

    A Heir of Land

    A heir of land he must not fail 
    A heir of land he must be Cail
     
    A heir of land a son of king 
    A heir of land he is a great being

    A heir of land helps the light
    A heir of land must win the fight
     
    A heir of land he must be brave
    A heir of land or sent to the grave

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    Spontaneous commented on A Heir of Land

    12-02-2009

    Wonderful write, I found it very graceful....but I would like to suggest one thing to change...I believe your poem would be much more lovely if you replaced [A] with [An]. but other than that, this is a beautiful write....I'm tingling^^

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