Ambush

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    Ambush
    My deadly love
    inject your poison
    silky, smooth as a viper
    Merciless with my heart
    devastating with your strikes
    And, I believed you
    you know how I wanted to...
    believe that you could love me
    So, I made my reflection lurid;
    long legs, slight hips,
    curving breast, pouting lips...
    distorted by bliss
    Then, I yearned for redemption -
    with-held by a twisted desire
    to hold you close
    And, I choke on a vacant soul

    Leah Spatafora
    12-20-2008

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    danmartyjake1 commented on Ambush

    02-23-2010

    Short with provocative message and meaning in the words about souls and the quality of them. Well written.
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    Loke commented on Ambush

    01-31-2010

    I think your poem is cool, quite motivating actually!
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    dragongirlie

    02/01/2010

    Hi Loke, I looked back on this piece after reading your comment, and the only thing I can find motivational is that yearning for redemption. I have days though, when I wonder if it is even possible for any of us to trully be redeemed. As I told Ginga, I actually wrote this piece many years ago; and, I have outgrown much of the childish thoughts of a girl (I hope). Though I like to keep myself up, I don't find the need to use my looks as a tool any more. Funny thing is, all these years later my deadly love has come to be my one true love & he tells me I'm beautiful on days I am most plain in my own opinion. Peace be with you...

    Loke

    02/23/2010

    I re-read this poem. I think inspirational's a better word!

    ginga commented on Ambush

    01-27-2010

    dragon, "and I choke on a vacant soul" does it for me. Such a punchline so to speak that ends a mesmerizing poem. ginga
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    dragongirlie

    02/01/2010

    HI Ginga, there is an empty feeling that comes from going after a person who has demons, but love isn't logical. Love does have the power to heal deep wounds though. My fiance Michael and I are about to celebrate seventeen years of loving and laughing. Michael just celebrated 15 years clean too. I wrote this piece many years ago.

    knight4696 commented on Ambush

    01-01-2010

    Very Nice write Leah! Dark and sexy... Just the way I like! :)
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    cliftondurant commented on Ambush

    11-17-2009

    this is a beautiful piece i love it keep writing you got talent thanks for sharing
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    When power leads man towards arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the area of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.

    John F. Kennedy (1917-1963) Thirty-fifth President of the USA

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